https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 07:40:01 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-82918 Tue, 04 Jan 2005 00:27:59 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club musicmaniac221 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-82918 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81889 Wed, 29 Dec 2004 02:05:36 +0000
Sorry. And Thanks

+]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81889 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81867 Tue, 28 Dec 2004 23:45:18 +0000 C
So as i look into your eyes
The colours begin to fade
I tryed so hard to reach you
But your still so far away
And I know where you are
Even when you dont believe
Your right up with the stars
That burn up there, somewhere we never see]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club DillyDally https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81867 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81821 Tue, 28 Dec 2004 16:31:57 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81821 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81772 Tue, 28 Dec 2004 04:10:55 +0000 It's a good song.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Virgel Cane https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81772 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81756 Tue, 28 Dec 2004 02:19:52 +0000 .......lol.....sorry i know im chating rubbish :lol: lol

cheers!!
+]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81756 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81714 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 21:37:11 +0000 Have you composed it playing, or away of the guitar?
if so...have you tried music over it?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club noel-iu https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81714 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81699 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 21:03:12 +0000
Good solid song.
I like the bridge lot. At least up to this point:
Left your castle
To live with beggars and theives
Fell to their weary eyes
And the smoky air they breath
Dragged through the bitter ground But the last couple of lines:
all was covered with finest dirt
yet still we could make some rain
To wash away all this mud It seems a tad bland. And it also adds the possibility that things aren't that dark, yet most of your song suggests that things ain't gonna get better and theres no going back.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Virgel Cane https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81699 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81692 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 20:48:59 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club guitargeek https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81692 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81630 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 08:29:59 +0000
Your bridge sounds o k to me if I was going to do anything to it (bridge )

I probably shorten it if anything

So here goes sorry if you don't like what I do to it !

you have :

B
Left your castle
To live with beggars and theives
Fell to their weary eyes
And the smoky air they breath
Dragged through the bitter ground
And covered up with dirt
But i still think we could make some rain
To wash away this mud

my version is :

Left your castle
To live with beggars and theives
Fell to their weary eyes
And the smoky air they breath
no fortune
now your doomed
now your doomed

ok it's probably the best but hey I gave it a shot

cheers]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/black-crayon/#post-81630