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But thanx all!]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club youngrawker https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151862 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151657 Fri, 13 Jan 2006 12:46:31 +0000
The story is really good, chorus is really good as well, not much else to say, write music to it, record it, sell it.

I hate to be a perfectionist, but you didn't label one of the choruses. Also, Verse 3 doesn't look like a verse, it's only one line, I'm guessing it's a "Middle" section.

Anyway, good writing.

Cheers.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club oasisman https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151657 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151629 Fri, 13 Jan 2006 07:53:26 +0000
This is a very nice piece of writting

the chorus is very well constructed ( i love it )

good work keep up the writting]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151629 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151532 Fri, 13 Jan 2006 04:40:00 +0000 And the hands keep ticking Did you switch this around on purpose?
Or was it meant to be :

And the clock keep ticking
And the hands keep ticking?

Also do something like this?

His clocks keep spinning
as his hands keep ticking ?

Or :

His clocks keep spinning
As time keeps ticking
He's so far ahead
that there's no way back.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club DillyDally https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-151532 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-14566 Fri, 13 Jan 2006 04:10:45 +0000
(VERSE 1)
Hes lost in a world
Inside his mind
His best friend becomes
His darkest lie
He's all alone
Running from life
He knows hes wrong
And searches for right

(BRIDGE)
He can't remember what its like to feel alive

(CHORUS)
And the clocks keep spinning
And the hands keep ticking
But theres no turning back
But theres no turning back from here

(VERSE 2)
Another day
Screaming inside
He tries to escape
From the endless fight
So much to see
But never the light
Cold and Lost
In the middle of the night

(BRIDGE)
He cant remember what its like to feel alive

And the clocks keep spinning
And the hands keep ticking
But theres no turning back
But theres no turning back from here

(VERSE 3)
I guess this is our last "goodbye"

(CHORUS)
And the clocks keep spinning
And the hands keep ticking
But theres no turning back
But theres no turning back from here]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club youngrawker https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/clocks/#post-14566