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Glad you liked it E.Sherman! Because I haven't wrote many it feels great hearing that.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Good https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-84403 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-84370 Tue, 11 Jan 2005 01:35:30 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club E.Sherman https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-84370 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-84366 Tue, 11 Jan 2005 01:26:44 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club musicmaniac221 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-84366 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-6243 Mon, 10 Jan 2005 02:34:50 +0000 Look at the sky at night
Is it not as black day
as people say

City light, shine on city night
*Hiding under tights
The hookers pray*
God may one day
Press the button fight and overwrite

Humming bird stacked up like sheer white height
Now takes flight with delight
The bird of night
Out of sight

Edit:
So, I thought these lyrics created a nice image. Maybe not the most though provoking words to ever be put together though. I'm also pretty sure another verse is needed after the one beginning City light, and I should possibly even work in some sort of chorus although I think it may work well with just the beginning and end verses beginnning in the same way.

I'm particularly unhappy with the part I've marked with stars, it just seems a bit, well, rubbish, doesn't it? Oh yeah and the same goes for the title, I hadn't thought of one then I went to post this and realised I needed a subject heading.

Also, I'd like to sing it in a kind of talking way(ugh, horrible description I know). I'd like for it to plod along. But seeing as I've only been playing guitar a few months, every time I try to sing to it comes out hummmmmmmmmmmmmmming bird siiiiiiiiiiiiiitting tight. Which is just awful?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Good https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/dear-hummingbird/#post-6243