https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 07:11:39 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-175145 Thu, 04 May 2006 22:24:56 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Diluted_Metal https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-175145 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-174947 Wed, 03 May 2006 22:35:02 +0000
Good song you wrote there. :D

I only had trouble with the 1st verse and have some ideas for it.


My learning is not active
I'm not sure how to act
But I'm trying to reinvent my wheel
Although I experience delays in my assembling You could switch lines 1 & 2 and maybe rework the 4th line to give verse 1 a better flow.

Other then that, like I said you wrote a really good song.

Keep at it!!!]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Ghost https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-174947 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-16409 Mon, 20 Mar 2006 06:05:18 +0000
I'm not sure how to act
My learning is not active
But I'm trying to reinvent my wheel
Although I experience delays in my assembling



From the devil's advocate
Whos brooded over my insecurity in my head



Nonetheless
I see a remedy in disclosure
And I feel closure through acceptance



Enlightenment gives me a blip of inspiration
Inside my imagination
Making aspirational plans for the future
Making me profoundly happy
Although I struggle to sustain a seamless progression



Because the devil's advocate
Has fantasized over the past in my head



Nonetheless
I experience solace in thought
And I feel closure in Today



Confidence makes me spontaneous and foolish
Flitting my way into being despised
So I took some time
To gaze at your disclosure
Revealing that after all
We are alike



So now I attempt to redeem myself
Through benevolence and humility
Although I taste cravings of lust



Through my longing devil's advocate
Whos brooded over my loneliness in my head



Nonetheless
I feel happiness with friendship
And I find closure with life]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club LifeIsThought https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/disclose/#post-16409