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The accompaniment is reeeally simple, just one guitar and a simple aprt at that, as I've not been playing more than a couple years, and only on rare occaisions for the first, and...yeah. very simple, otherwise I couldn't play it or compose it. Plus I can't sing...well.

Anyway, yeah, I'll try to come up with something, and any help, pointers, whatever, on how to put it on the internet, would be appreciated, loved, and very possible considerations as means to purchase a certain soul.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club saint_duud https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-247867 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246789 Fri, 08 Jun 2007 04:07:24 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club coleclark https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246789 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246590 Thu, 07 Jun 2007 01:55:21 +0000
(edit)I've played with it some over the last few days, and changed a few small things.

Elegy

Broken and empty
Locked out of myself
Lost my grip on what I was
Now all I've got left is this hell

The falling, the fading
This feeling, like I'm dying
Wearing through from this bottomless aching
All I want now is to close my eyes

Chorus:
But through the dark I can see the light
Shining out of reach
I'm falling fast but I'm trying to hold
Onto what I can find of me

The faces I see
Flow through the shadows around me
Broken and empty
Dead eyes that can't see

Each one just like me

Chorus

And it might be that there's a guiding light
Even if it's hard to reach
In this world I know I'm not alone
But I'm not sure I believe]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club saint_duud https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246590 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246362 Wed, 06 Jun 2007 03:10:17 +0000
I couldn't resist

I cut your song to pieces but in the end this is all I could find without repeating. easy to sing too. cheers. gram99 Not bad. There's some lines I can't bring myself to use, like it's a living hell (been used too many times, and not a favorite metaphor of mine) but I like some of the ideas. New light is always a good thing to see in. I especially like maybe I'll close my eyes
till it all fades away thanks for the help. Had a new version, but I think I'll see what ideas of these I incorporate, then show you the changes.
Thanks, gram99. There was something I was missing to tie it together, and you pointed it out.
And yeah, there is a lot of repetition.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club saint_duud https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-246362 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245756 Sun, 03 Jun 2007 03:19:49 +0000
I couldn't resist

I cut your song to pieces but in the end this is all I could find without repeating. easy to sing too. cheers. gram99

simplify
simplify simplify
"thoreau"



Broken and empty
I can't find myself
Not all at once
It's a living hell


Chorus 1

The faces I see
every day on the street
flow by empty and broken
just like me



I'm falling I'm aching
because of the pain
maybe I'll close my eyes
till it all fades away


Chorus 2
But I can see the light
just out of reach
If only if only
what we could have been
falling past
falling fast
I want to believe
I want to believe]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club gram99 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245756 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245419 Fri, 01 Jun 2007 01:14:19 +0000
Thanks for the comments.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club saint_duud https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245419 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245188 Thu, 31 May 2007 01:21:37 +0000
Gosha.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club gosha34 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245188 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245019 Wed, 30 May 2007 15:20:04 +0000
My only thought is that with 3 choruses it feels slightly drawn out at the end - although they are different, they kind of say the same things.

Perhaps adding another verse in between 2 and 3 would help to make it flow better? Perhaps even a repeat of the verse you have already could work.

Pete]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Embrace_the_Darkness https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-245019 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-25888 Tue, 29 May 2007 23:20:15 +0000
Elegy

Broken and empty
I can't find myself
Not all that I once was
Im resigned to this hell

I'm falling I'm fading
Slowly I'm dying
In this pain, this aching
I'm closing my eyes

Chorus
But through the dark I can see the light
It's shining out of reach
I'm falling past it, I'm trying to grab
To hold onto me

The people I pass on
The street that I walk down
Remind me I'm caught in
A world I've forsaken

I've seen their faces
Flowing past me
They're empty and broken
With eyes closed that can't see

Chorus
But through the dark I can see the light
It's shining out of reach
We're falling past and all we can hold
Is what we wished we'd be
What we wished we'd be

The faces on the street
Flowing past me
They're empty and broken
Each one just like me

Chorus
But through the dark I can see the light
It's shining out of reach
We're falling past and all we can hold
Is what we wished we'd be
Through the dark I can see the light
Shining out of reach
We're falling now, all we've got
Is what we believe
What we believe
All we have is what we believe
Webelieve]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club saint_duud https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/elegy/#post-25888