https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 04:48:31 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-300264 Sun, 13 Jul 2008 04:52:10 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sipi1910 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-300264 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297639 Mon, 23 Jun 2008 04:47:07 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sipi1910 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297639 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297634 Mon, 23 Jun 2008 03:00:37 +0000
when its my voice that he hears
when his heart starts to break

It's that first "when" that is confusing to me.
Maybe leave it out or substituting "for" and it will be clearer.

KR2]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297634 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297622 Mon, 23 Jun 2008 00:23:43 +0000 Do you have a tune for it?
I understand the father not seeing his son but I don't understand where

when its my voice that he hears
when his heart starts to break

those two lines come from.

It might be worth wording it so that the
broken promise ties in with the broken heart. Hey kenrogers2! Thanks for the reply! You got the subject right but it's actually about my soon to be ex-wife not seeing our son. The lines you were referring to talk about ME having to break promises that SHE has made to him and him hearing my voice telling him the bad news...maybe I should reword that part...]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sipi1910 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297622 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297508 Sun, 22 Jun 2008 05:20:17 +0000 Do you have a tune for it?
I understand the father not seeing his son but I don't understand where

when its my voice that he hears
when his heart starts to break

those two lines come from.

It might be worth wording it so that the
broken promise ties in with the broken heart.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-297508 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-32270 Sat, 21 Jun 2008 23:46:20 +0000
you can blame it on marrying young
even blame it on me if you want
if thats what gets you through
another night of fun

if you could see the tears fill his eyes
as he watches you drive away
you'd turn your car around
and you would stay

i cant break another promise
another promise that you've made

when its my voice that he hears
when his heart starts to break

chorus
dont you ever wonder what he said today
or what he made at school
his favorite games to play

his favorite color is blue
and he swears he's spider man
these are just a few things
that should matter to you]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sipi1910 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/first-shot-at-lyrics/#post-32270