https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 01:44:01 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88841 Tue, 08 Feb 2005 09:13:37 +0000 Verse 1
I only hate you.
Because I hate me too.
This pain is to deep!

I see me
When I look at you.
Thats the part
I hate the most of you.
This path leads to steep! There's an ancient writing tip, and that is to avoid exposition of your ideas. Another, more focused for songwriting, is not to shoot your whole wad right out of the gate, so to speak. You've got both of these in the first three lines - you're exposing his hate and then you shoot off what should be toward the end: the reason he hates this person, is what he sees in himself. Which, I might add at this point, is a damn good theme for a song. I would suggest you be a little more subtle about the whole thing and save the self-depreciative for later, and spread it out more along all of the song. I will say now that I didn't bring up your second verse because it's pretty good. It has all that it needs to and it isn't over the top. It even sets up the problem. In fact, if you're not too willing to change the lyrics a lot, I'd suggest switching the verses around and consider making the verse I quoted above just a little less explicit. I think you've got something of a good song on your hands!]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Scott https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88841 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88840 Tue, 08 Feb 2005 09:07:40 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Mezlay https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88840 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88398 Sat, 05 Feb 2005 01:38:49 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club yoyo286 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-88398 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-6879 Fri, 04 Feb 2005 02:48:48 +0000
ok Song is about hating some1 but what you hate about them is really what you hate about yourself

Verse 1
I only hate you.
Because I hate me too.
This pain is to deep!

I see me
When I look at you.
Thats the part
I hate the most of you.
This path leads to steep!


Verse 2
And night after night.
Each fight after fight.
Were left there to die.
Our hearts scared by...

Each and every fatal blow.
One more one less to go.
This fight will never end..

working on chorus it's a rock song singing is a lil wierd but it keeps u wanting more.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sumfears https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/i-hate-me/#post-6879