https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 02:22:53 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108578 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 20:23:06 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club GAZ-UK https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108578 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108543 Mon, 27 Jun 2005 16:11:50 +0000
I agree glaring and staring is a stretch since it says the same thing and is a waste of a word. I'll give it some thought.

The turning a good thing bad refers to giving away his secret. If he tells the other guys he has xray vision, then others will find out, then he can't secretly see through female garments because everyone will know what he's looking at. I know it's shallow, but it's a shallow song.

Just curious. Did anyone else not get that? I had a line saying he could see through girls dresses but it was kinda seedy and my wife encouraged me to take it out. :roll:]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108543 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108344 Sat, 25 Jun 2005 15:50:20 +0000 Don't give away your secrets. Just act like superman. "

i dont get it...turn what bad? and how would he turn it bad?
kinda sounds like you have just thrown a few verses together to make up the song..i quite like it..but i think personally it needs some tweaking ,and more verses that make sense, i like how that verse goes into the last verse thats clever....but i didnt really follow the song

but hey dude if you as the writer understands the song..then who cares?
just an opinion....if ive seemed offensive in any way just take it with a pinch of salt because its just my opinion..

gaz :)]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club GAZ-UK https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108344 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108292 Sat, 25 Jun 2005 02:19:46 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club nocturne181 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108292 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108169 Fri, 24 Jun 2005 02:25:32 +0000 I never shoot for full rhyme. I like half rhyme. I think that's what you're refering to. No, I love half rhymes... my stuff is full of 'em. I was refering to the just the choice of some words to make a rhyme led me to think that maybe the line was shaped by the need for a rhyme (or half rhyme), rather than to say what you wanted to say. For example, the first two lines of the song, and the first two lines of the chorus. I could be wrong.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108169 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108127 Thu, 23 Jun 2005 21:09:56 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club nocturne181 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108127 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108095 Thu, 23 Jun 2005 16:20:41 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108095 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108091 Thu, 23 Jun 2005 15:56:45 +0000
I never shoot for full rhyme. I like half rhyme. I think that's what you're refering to. It makes the listener think, gives me more options, and it doesn't have that 'Mary had a little lamb' redundancy.

The song could be deeper but it focuses on funk rather that depth (thought of J. Geils when I wrote it). The symbolism is the edge a nerdy kid has on the cool kids, which really makes the nerdy kid cooler. Could have been computer science skills, musical ability, or any talent. Instead they're magic xray glasses.

I actually had to change a couple lines since it didn't pass the PG-13 censor at home. Kinda sucked but I'm always willing to compromise.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108091 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108061 Thu, 23 Jun 2005 06:27:27 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-108061 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-107936 Wed, 22 Jun 2005 16:52:41 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club rejectedagain https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/jakeys-xray-vision/#post-107936