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Sozay- I'm gonna try to edit it, the chords are in the wrong parts of the lines, and I agree with the chorus change, since I really don't like putting words into my bridges, dunno, pet peeve


now I'm liking my skin
since I felt your heart beating
I sense the same from within]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Snoogans775 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-64954 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-64918 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 11:14:32 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club E.Sherman https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-64918 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-64908 Wed, 11 Aug 2004 06:24:48 +0000
I liked this a lot. couple great lines imo
"we make ourselves the greatest fools,"
and the whole 4th verse.
The one thing that occured to me thou, was that the chorus matched the mood of the frirst verse or two, but then the character becomes more open in the last couple of verse, and i think the chorus should reflect this evolution too, perhaps a different chorus over the same chords in the 2nd half of the song...

Also it cool that you put in the chords... i'll have a strum when i get home.

Anyways this is a great song, good writing
sozay]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club sozay https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-64908 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-3066 Tue, 10 Aug 2004 13:08:04 +0000 Verse 1 Am C G I don't need these common operations G F Em F G to spend some time with you I'll adapt myself to the stiuation and spend some time with you Chorus D I'm scared of this skin Gmaj7 C this place where I've been livin' D (Turnaround)(uber-complicated chords) I hope you can get in Verse 2 I may not love you every day but every day will be true but when I'm the man I really want to be Then I'll love you Chorus Verse 3 we're not perfect, we just want to be we make ourselves the greatest fools, but all I see is the finest woman in the world and all I want is to be with you Chorus Verse 4 and though the stars are beautiful tonight I'd rather tilt my head away And in my sight I see the only thing our world needs me looking at you and you looking at me I'm drained, I was hoping I could write more, but I suppose I'm a little out of writing condition :(]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Snoogans775 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/looking-at-you/#post-3066