https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 11:10:08 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-108125 Thu, 23 Jun 2005 21:04:39 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club nocturne181 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-108125 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-107929 Wed, 22 Jun 2005 15:54:40 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-107929 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-107826 Wed, 22 Jun 2005 03:02:37 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club nocturne181 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-107826 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-106963 Thu, 16 Jun 2005 19:56:40 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-106963 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-106915 Thu, 16 Jun 2005 12:52:34 +0000

What you have here is a very solid start with some very good lines in how ever do think it does need a little tweeking .

you can tell me to pull my head in if you don't agree but this is what I thought your lyrics needed

Memories have started to fade,
Between these feelings of hurt and rage,
I am just so mad----so mad at you

YOU HAVE

Memories just starting to fade,
In between these feelings of rage,
Why am I so mad at you?

I never thought I could lose you,
You felt I wasn't there for you,
And I really do need you tonight.

you have
I never thought I would ever lose you,
You fell I wasn't there to catch you,
But I needed you tonight.

hope you don't mind ?

let me know what you think

cheers L.K :arrow:]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-106915 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-9472 Thu, 02 Jun 2005 23:09:36 +0000
This feeling just began
I'll never see you again
I've never felt like this before

Memories just starting to fade,
In between these feelings of rage,
Why am I so mad at you?

I never thought I would ever lose you,
You fell I wasn't there to catch you,
But I needed you tonight.

When I saw you lying there
I couldnt think I was much too scared
But I know I knew that day.

Spiraling memories
Painful memories
Make me numb to you.
Make me unfeeling
Stop my heartbleeding
I dont want to care.

Looking at your picture
An aimless thought with a fixture
I had to put it down.

We were so happy then
My thoughts start to blend
I'm at a loss of words

How can you know this pain
I'll never be the same
I needed you tonight.

Who's to say whats just and fair
Who said they could take you there
But I know I knew that day

Spiraling memories
Painful memories
Make me numb to you
Make me unfeeling
Stop my heart bleeding
I just dont want to care.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club nocturne181 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/loss/#post-9472