https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 19:40:59 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-84178 Mon, 10 Jan 2005 00:26:47 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club chad https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-84178 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83763 Fri, 07 Jan 2005 20:15:15 +0000 we move through hostility
the ground shakes men die
again, its raining artillery

paragraph`s 1,2 and 4 = VS`s

paragraph 5 as a bridge

hope this helps....]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club cooker https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83763 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83751 Fri, 07 Jan 2005 19:18:01 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club musicmaniac221 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83751 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83702 Fri, 07 Jan 2005 12:14:41 +0000
I just picked these lines in no particular order

for what? a polititians dreams?
" For what ? the polititians dreams ? ( just thought there is usually more than one )

i ask, is this for real?im reminded

"I ask is this for real man ? ( just thiught it might just add something )


oh well that's my 5 cents worth

cheers]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-83702 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-6179 Fri, 07 Jan 2005 11:42:47 +0000

follow the tank's tracks
down another dirt road
re-sling your rifles
and stretch your elbows

will there be more shooting?
or just another long walk?
with no hot bullets
and our guns staying cocked

loaded, ready and scared
we move through hostility
the ground shakes men die
again, its raining artillery

take cover under that bush
as bullets whiz overhead
i ask, is this for real?im reminded
as good men are falling dead

i guess the cost of victory
is explosions and dying screams
courageous men losing their families
for what? a polititians dreams?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club chad https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/really-rough-suggestions-please/#post-6179