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It may be in there, but I'd like to hear more about how the soldier feels about being away from home. You describe a lot of scenery, which is good, but to me, you're a bit light on emotion.

I think your strongest lines are the ones that match both, like the line about the postcard.

Also, the God-like knowledge that this will be the soldier's last Christmas seems out of place. Maybe talking about how he/she is fighting back the knowledge that it is possible/likely that it will be their last Christmas. I think that'd more interesting, and more engaging of the listener.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/silent-night/#post-106888 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/silent-night/#post-106786 Wed, 15 Jun 2005 20:31:27 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club MetalWerk2 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/silent-night/#post-106786 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/silent-night/#post-9534 Tue, 07 Jun 2005 02:23:58 +0000
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Silent Night

Silent night, blood-soaked daytime
Poets dreams, soldiers cries
You better pray for tomorrow
You better pray that you said goodbye

The postcard view's no consolation
Just one of god's sick jokes to make you think
The blood and screams conspire against you
But now you see the price that you must pay

He said the odds of winning were beside him
Now he's digging out the nameless graves
He'll mask his fear with cries of fury
But soon his peace will strike eternally

The bells ain't ringing but it's christmas
He'll spend it in this eerie hell
Don't go thinking that it's the first time
But what he doesn't know is that it'll be the last as well

Silent night, blood-soaked daytime
Poets dream, soldiers cry
We'll curse, we'll grieve, we'll mourn, we'll pray
But we won't ask the reason why

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Your thoughts and opinions appreciated,

Pete. :)]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club P_Allen https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/silent-night/#post-9534