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Thats what i thought, but ja anyway, its a really cool song, is it on like a classical guitar?, like a mellow kinda song?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Diluted_Metal https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-175148 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174912 Wed, 03 May 2006 19:57:31 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174912 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174833 Wed, 03 May 2006 07:57:14 +0000
Don't you just hate that? Searching for music for your song and you come across a great tune unfortunately it just doesn't suit your song. I have like 8-9 cool progressions backlogged on my cpu just incase I need them for later. :D]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Majesta https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174833 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174808 Wed, 03 May 2006 04:48:10 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174808 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174805 Wed, 03 May 2006 04:41:06 +0000
im pretty sure it could never be sung exactly how its written, i havent even tried yet. Normally when I write something the lyrics get pruned a bit when i actually sing them, just kinda naturally happens.

That second verse is supposed to be a schoolyard type image of looking down on shadows (yourself) holding hands against a wall

The writing is a little extraneous for a song I guess, might just call this one a poem and forget it haha.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174805 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174803 Wed, 03 May 2006 04:26:34 +0000
Someone in bed when the sun comes through his window. He sees the shadow of a loved one?, and follows her out the window and down the side of the house. The sun starts shining to bright in his eyes as he comes back to reality. Where he's alone in his home, at night.

One problem I have with your song is the fact that I had to read it over so many times before I could make a guess about what is going on. Personally, I believe when someone "listens" to a song for the first time, they should understand the concept of the lyrics. When they listen again, they'll begin to notice the finer details of the story. Perhaps, I'm just poetically inept. In my opinion you wrote almost too detailed. It's a fine line, but I think you might of crossed it.

A) A bright bothersome sunrise beckons to my eyes
B) A swarm of sunlight falls upon my eyes
C) The bright morning sun creeps into my eyes
D) Ect..

You're line being (A), mine being (B/C). These are not suggested replacements, don't misunderstand. I just feel that sometimes less is more, ya know?

It's kind of like the comic brick wall syndrome. In comics, (book or newspaper), when the characters are infront of a wall, the artist only draws enough bricks for you to know it's a wall. Sure, more would be more detailed, and might make the drawing look more "accurate". However, it would distract from what's really supposed to be the reader's main focus.

I dunno, that's my opinion. I could just be dumb. :oops:]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Majesta https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-174803 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-17426 Tue, 02 May 2006 23:35:01 +0000 a muscle tenses up so the curtains surly rise
and your light hits my lens and it focuses to you
your a vision of perfection sliding smoothly into view

Your my sweetheart's shadow holding hands against the wall
Just 2 steps out and down the side we fall
So hold on tight if you feel my hand slippin
and cover up quick before the rain starts a drippin

You've been mine for as long as I remember
and even if our fire died, it'd rise up from the embers
So let the sun wrap your silhouette and my fingers hold your hand
And the light hit your eyes like a diamond in the sand

"Goodmorning sunshine" you say with a smile
but sleep still holds unto my hand for awhile
the blinding light its too bright for my dreaming
your spinning in the center scintillating and gleaming

And I awake to the radio and blinds closed tight
not that it matters in the middle of the night
you danced out of view through the window to the skies
and leave me in the dark without the light behind your eyes]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/the-light-behind-your-eyes/#post-17426