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Hey!
I'd probably not written it well. I'm spanish... and sometimes it gets hard to explain myself as I wish
I mean she is in hurry because his eyes are gettin dry and she doesn't want to let me see her cry.
Could you help me to rewrite it properly?
Thanks!
oh well I'll try anyway

you have :

But your eyes
said you hurry
you don't want
start here to cry


I say :


It's in your eyes
I don't want you to hear my cries
oh please .... baby please realise
Just open the gate before it's too late


hope you like

reference to openthe gate is please leave

another suggestion would be to have it in Spanish that way you could say exactly what want you want to and it might add a bit of spice to it


that's my 5 cents worth hope you like


cheers]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-81808 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-81710 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 21:33:33 +0000 I'd probably not written it well. I'm spanish... and sometimes it gets hard to explain myself as I wish
I mean she is in hurry because his eyes are gettin dry and she doesn't want to let me see her cry.
Could you help me to rewrite it properly?
Thanks!]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club noel-iu https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-81710 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-81690 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 20:45:29 +0000
But your eyes
said you hurry
you don't want
start here to cry

other than it i think it was maybe a little vague, could do with some more story]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club guitargeek https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-81690 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-5880 Mon, 27 Dec 2004 19:15:55 +0000 This is a very simple song... I don't pretend to make money maker songs... so don't be harsh please (have a look at the last posts and see what I mean)

Too late (not sure of the title)

Verse
You said
'Please don't worry'
'I'll be O.K.'
'I'll be fine'

But your eyes
said you hurry
you don't want
start here to cry

Chorus
I knew what you wanted to say
I thought that it's too late
...it's too late...

Verse
just
as I lay down
as I think twice
what have I said?

Then
I realise
Have not been wise
treating her

Chorus
I knew what I wanted to say
I wouldn't wish it happened this way
wish we turn back and make it well
but it's too late...

what do you think?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club noel-iu https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/too-late/#post-5880