https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 23:58:48 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-82923 Tue, 04 Jan 2005 00:38:39 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club musicmaniac221 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-82923 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-81044 Thu, 23 Dec 2004 01:09:06 +0000
She grabbed the ticket and ran
leaving me behind without a tear
she never had to hide her feelings
she was always so open
until she met me,


if i take that out, its more smooth to me, thanks for the constructive criticism]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club DillyDally https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-81044 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-81043 Thu, 23 Dec 2004 01:06:43 +0000
the flow don't work for me sorry

this is good :
She grabbed the ticket and ran
leaving me behind without a tear
she never had to hide her feelings

then you have added this which does not flow the same way :
she was always so open
until she met me,

same here :
I feel down, scraping my knees
she kept running ignoring my pleas
i scrambled up loosing sight of her
never did find a cure for my love of her

and this part doesn't work in this verse :

as if love potion #9 never wore off

sorry DD it just don't work for me

that's my 5 cents worth

cheers]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-81043 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/uncurable-love/#post-5762 Thu, 23 Dec 2004 00:44:37 +0000 leaving me behind without a tear
she never had to hide her feelings
she was always so open
until she met me,

I feel down, scraping my knees
she kept running ignoring my pleas
i scrambled up loosing sight of her
never did find a cure for my love of her
as if love potion #9 never wore off

Now i sit here everyday
wasting away
dreaming night after night
of my never ending fight
during the day, just wandering
wandering around with no purpose


O Why O Why Couldn't She Of Just Cried
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