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just read your replies to your song and agree with this one Cooker suggested "Blue Skies Grey World "
It has a nice ring to it and fits the song so well

oh well that's my 5 cents worth]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-84103 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83928 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 18:52:02 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club musicmaniac221 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83928 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83879 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 07:39:11 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club cooker https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83879 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83857 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 04:02:07 +0000
this world it is ending
it's been a nice dream
but things are never
the way we make them seem]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club urbnite https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83857 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83850 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 03:29:18 +0000
yeah cooker, you're right. the word 'world' is in here way too much, especially in the second verse.

not sure i want to set a title yet - i tend to give things multiple names sometimes... but maybe 'follow blue skies'. it's a bit more optimistic.

might come back and do an edit later...]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club urbnite https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83850 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83846 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 03:07:43 +0000 I`ll take another look....

For a title..how about
(My) State Of The World
When The World Turns Grey
Blue Skies Grey World

Hope this helps... :) cooker]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club cooker https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83846 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83830 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 01:47:03 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club guitargeek https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-83830 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-6194 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 01:34:21 +0000
please excuse the newbie who can't stop posting.

this is a song i'd really love some feedback on... i wrote it before this last election and it's about... well, i guess it's kind of about the state of the world as i see it.

i'm reluctant to sing this song for anyone because i feel like the lyrics are TERRIBLE. a couple friends have told me otherwise, but i think maybe they're just too nice.

is it cliched? cheesy? i can't tell anymore. so if anyone would care to comment i'd greatly appreciate it.

thanks!


this world it is changing
there's nothing to say
the fall of an empire
that's seen its last days


i'll follow blue skies
let them take me away
cause i don't wanna be there
when the world turns grey


this world it is ending
it's been a nice dream
but things are never
the way we make them seem




we'll meet at the world's end
where color fades away
no more words, throw out your pen
and put all your songs away


and we'll follow blue skies
let them take us away
cause i don't wanna be there
when the world turns grey

no i don't wanna be there
when the world turns grey]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club urbnite https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/untitled-please-help/#post-6194