https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 08:27:13 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-68569 Wed, 08 Sep 2004 07:54:50 +0000 Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Artistx13 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-68569 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67800 Fri, 03 Sep 2004 03:25:58 +0000
If you don't want to give it back, you're hooked!!

Vic]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67800 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67794 Fri, 03 Sep 2004 02:42:23 +0000
and i do want to learn how to play guitar just i dont want to spend the money on it then decide a month later to quit

and thanks for the feedback!]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Noobie https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67794 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67792 Fri, 03 Sep 2004 02:36:03 +0000
thing the second - these are good efforts.......

first song is very easy to set to music, even though i'm not a big grunge fan....it flows well, lyrics are good - maybe if you look back at it dispassionately, as an outside observer, you may find a few things to change, but we're talking fine tuning.......

the second song is a little harder to get a handle on, but when you get past the unusual structure - the way I did it was looking as it as poetry, so let's not knock poetry eh people?.......looking to see how it scans, how to fit the lines together......I can put fairly simple chords to this that sound good to my ears, but probably not the way you thought of it........

anyway, it's a good start, keep writing, there are plenty of people who'll tell you here what they like - and don't like - about your songs, but they'll also tell you why...........

Vic]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-67792 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-3511 Fri, 03 Sep 2004 02:17:11 +0000
"Isolation"

Out of the blue
Out of the white
Out of the sky
Breaks the sun

It caught my eye
It caught my mind
It caught my feelings
Please me revive

I want restored and helped inside
Brought back for I have died
Wanna escape this deep, dark pit
But no one gives again

No one gave again (x3)
Ill never give again

Something transpired
Something emerged
Something appeared
Too vague to tell

I went faster
I went quicker
I went needing
Left me behind

I want restored and helped inside
Brought back for I have died
Wanna escape this deep, dark pit
But no one gives again

Cut was my head
Hurt was my mind
Bad thoughts inside
Ruined my life
Misguided trust
Surely enough
When I shared
Guess whhaaatttt

No one gave again(x3)
Ill never give again

So here alone I sit
So here alone I sit
So here alone I think
Will I die alone

I thought that one was maybe too simple so i wrote this one right after

With this song i was thinking a 2 string lead riff that moves from low to higher where 4, 2 string picks makes up the split lines. 1 2 string pick for each single word at the beginning (I, did, etc.) yet it's slow enough to get the longer 3rd line in, in 2 picks. If u can't understand here it is in words: duh duh....duh duh....duh duh...duh and repeat it for the cut up sections.

black indicates the low duh
red indicates higher(but not neccesarily high) duh

Also the sequence on a whole goes from low to higher as well: until u finish the longer 3rd line which is where u repeat

If u can't understand it, who cares just tell me what u think

"Deprivation"

I
Did
A thing not meant for me

Saw
A
World I never seen

Feel
For
Those with this same fate

Seek
-ing
The lives that are deprived

I see the monster as it's walking down the street
No matter what I do still some will never believe
Trying to act normal, It's hiding all the lies
My gut gets this feeling when I notice the fakes

Con-tin-ious Look-out
Con-stant De-fen-ding
Dark-ness my true friend
Will Never ever es-cape

No way to be free…when you have this life
Too much confusion…head engulfed in strife

No way to live
No way to live
Nooooo wayyyyyyy

At
First
I never knew of it

So
When
It knocked i let it in

Soon
Learned
Very big mistake

For
Of
My life i was raped

I see the monster as it's walking down the street
No matter what I do still some will never believe
Trying to act normal, It's hiding all the lies
My gut gets this feeling when I notice the fakes

Con-tin-ious Look-out
Con-stant De-fen-ding
Dark-ness my true friend
Will Never ever es-cape

No way to be free…when you have this life
Too much confusion…head engulfed in strife

No way (echo: to live)
No way (echo: to live)
No way to live

I can't believe im debating taking measures this far
All the neglect that's built, it starts to gain control
Something about not being here, leaving all the rest
Almost sounds too good to me I just might have to test

No way to live
No way to think
No way to suffer
No way for anything]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Noobie https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/well-first-2-songs-i-had-ever-written/#post-3511