https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 00:27:13 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-295404 Fri, 06 Jun 2008 22:37:01 +0000 there's a lot of different structures, though. you can make them as complex as you want or can handle or sounds good to you.
some song lyrics don't rhyme at all. there's usually still a similar structure from verse to verse, though. even rarer is completely free verse music, but it exists.]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-295404 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-294471 Fri, 30 May 2008 08:40:54 +0000 does it help it flow, does it give it more structure and rythem? or is there any use for it what soever? I am a big fan of counting the syllables. It makes a more structured song, easier to sing and easier
to write music for, though I don't write music myself. The example below repeats the same structure
in every verse, but I don't do that way all the time
Take a close look at the structure of "evergreen songs", those that stand the test of time.
Rhyming patterns play a big part, starting, internal and ending rhymes.
I make good use of Rhymezone.com when I'm composing.

Her Departure Was Torture (Larry W. Jones 05/29/2008) (song#5465)

Well, I knew it was over before it was over =12
Because I already heard the end of love's song =12
It was such a sad shame =6
But she had me to blame =6
Her departure was torture before she was gone =12

She packed up her duffel and let her feet shuffle
Right out the front door to the trunk of the sedan
It all came unravelled
And she left lots of gravel
Now I've nowhere to travel and drunken again

There's no easy answer for things like a transfer
From new love that was strong to old love that went wrong
This pain ain't new, my friend
Cause I knew it would end
Her departure was torture before she was gone

- instrumental -

She packed up her duffel and let her feet shuffle
Right out the front door to the trunk of the sedan
It all came unravelled
And she left lots of gravel
Now I've nowhere to travel and drunken again

There's no easy answer for things like a transfer
From new love that was strong to old love that went wrong
This pain ain't new, my friend
Cause I knew it would end
Her departure was torture before she was gone]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club lwj001 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-294471 https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-31925 Fri, 30 May 2008 08:12:59 +0000
okay, so, to start of with, i've been lurking around here for awhile now, and i thought i would like to ask others for there input and suggestions towards something like this.
now my writing.
i've written many poems, and prose, (i'm not sure if it could be considered lyrics (as lyrics are written with music)) but i still can't seem to find the right line inwhich i'm looking for. i'm not happy with anything i write, as with probably many people. i participate in the sunday songwriting group here, but it all turns more or less into unorganized rambles and poems.
which isnt something i'm really after. (but who's to say what's lyrics and what isnt)
something i'm questioning if it's worth trying to consider and write with is the use of syllables within a phrase or stanza?
does it help it flow, does it give it more structure and rythem? or is there any use for it what soever?
if so, then is it worth trying to revolve and rewrite lyrics concerning this, even if it doesnt fit a line or so?
i'm not talking about a change or a pattern (maybe one line with 5,another with 6 another with 8 and then 5 and 6 again?) but something more major that's awkward to have sung or written?
how about vocabulary? are bigger words worse in same way or another? or how about smaller and more relatable words?
i like to read alot, (hopefully you do too if you're continuing to read my ramble, sorry = (. ) and from reading, i always look up words and try to increase my language, but would this be deconstructive towards songwriting then?



one of the problems i have with playing guitar, is that almost everything i do is revolved around noodling around,
i wont play anything in particular, i'll just practice. improvise through scales and different chord progressions, and when i DO make or find something i like, i analyze the living hell out of it and kill it.
i consider myself more of a musician then a writer, and from this i try to make the best riff progression or lets call it 'playing' as i can and from there, i wont be able to pick out words to fit it in someway or another. but then i'll feel i can do better if i just resort to playing chords most likely something revolving around the classic 1,4,5 pattern and there i can create words and things overtop, but i felt nothing has 'stuck' so to say.

i've been playing guitar for about five years now, writing for about a year and seriously attempting to craft something musically of my own for about half of that year. but so far, i cant get away from my standards of what it is i make.

personaly, i think it's myself holding me back but i dont know how i can get away from it.

in your opinion, how can i try and get myself out of this hole i've dug? what can i do to help me get started and fix my outlook upon this? thoughts? opinions? ... anything?
= )
thanks for taking the time to read this and possibly reply, even spending a good half an hour writing this out has helped me focus in and signal out to myself what i need to work on and where i'm at. sorry if i repeated anything, think of it as extra emphasis on something or other?]]> Guitar Noise Songwriting Club Megalomaniac https://guitarnoise.forum/guitar-noise-songwriting-club/whats-wrong-whats-wrong-i-just-cant-make-a-song/#post-31925