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I like your song, maybe it could need some work though
(but who am I to suggest this?)

well, I just think these lines:The lies inside of me are dimming, the pain inside is dying;
If everything in me is changing, then why am I still crying? are very beautiful but maybe you needn't repeat them that often in the end...*thinking* -well maybe it's alright cause it's only twice and I can see why you would do this

don't get distracted by me:)
keep it up
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/a-song-i-wrote-please-critique/#post-61113 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/a-song-i-wrote-please-critique/#post-2471 Sun, 23 May 2004 00:03:54 +0000 The kiss that would inflict my heart..
These feelings run inside of me;
You have released me from my misery..

The lies inside of me are dimming, the pain inside is dying;
If everything in me is changing, then why am I still crying?

Have you ever stopped to realize;
That I have loved you forever..
I dont know how to explain this;
These feelings inside are weightless..


The lies inside of me are dimming, the pain inside is dying;
If everything in me is changing, then why am I still crying?

These lies inside arent killing me, the pain inside isnt hurting me
I think I've finally done with it, I wish that you were here with me

The lies inside of me are dimming, the pain inside is dying;
If everything in me is changing, then why am I still crying?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/a-song-i-wrote-please-critique/#post-2471