https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 14:32:31 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153835 Mon, 23 Jan 2006 05:17:25 +0000 Do you see?

Edit: sorry, that bit was not changed from the original, plus, on reading it again, I am not even sure if it is meant to rhyme that way. Please ignore my comment.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153835 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153799 Mon, 23 Jan 2006 03:05:54 +0000 "I know I'm not alone."

I was just trying to say that I'm not the only one who has ever questioned about the afterlife, heaven, or whatever. Maybe something less recognized would be better.

Hey Beren. Your on the nose with the subtley whishing for death. Not in a gothic, suicidal manner by any means. I think suicide is for p*ssies. So, yeah the lyric is just adding to the curiousity.

Sup dhodge. I see where you're coming from. Maybe something like this would work for the last verse:

Sometimes it's only the weight
That keeps holding me down.
The weight of this casing
That must be parted from my mind.
A head full of this sight
Is all I can see.
The only way to go
Is to lose my body.

And then I'll try to re-work the first verse. Let me know what ya think. Thanks for the feedback guys.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153799 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153531 Sat, 21 Jan 2006 05:28:04 +0000
The last verse seems more of the result of the other two verses. Verse two is the curiousity, verse three is the questioning of "how" and the realization that the body must go. If you reworked the first verse a bit and made it more about the shedding of the "casing" as it were, you'd have a complete arc.

I like, no pun intended, the light airy feel of this despite the subject matter. It's a good use of imagery.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153531 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153430 Fri, 20 Jan 2006 19:58:11 +0000 This song definitely appeals to the dimly remembered angsty teenager in me.
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153430 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153384 Fri, 20 Jan 2006 15:31:43 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153384 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153332 Fri, 20 Jan 2006 07:53:04 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153332 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153082 Thu, 19 Jan 2006 12:18:44 +0000
This is very good but I feel it maybe if you change the order a little ..

The first chorus talks about being holding down

The second chorus talks about curiosity

I think it maybe better if they were swapped around

So you start with being curious then be held down

just my 5 cents worth

I'm only learning so if that does not make any sense please ignore it

hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-153082 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-14765 Thu, 19 Jan 2006 02:59:45 +0000
Blue Skies

Sometimes it's only the weight
That keeps holding me down.
The weight of this casing
That must be parted from my mind.
So I can fly.
So I can fly.

A calling to the skies is all this is.
I'm looking through the eyes of the flesh.
I'm trying to find the place of all creation.
Searching for the blue past all the rest.

Drawing in my curiosity.
What really lies past the clouds?
Held back by my mortality.
I just want to rise out of these crowds.
So I can fly.
So I can fly.

A calling to the skies is all this is.
I'm looking through the eyes of the flesh.
I'm trying to find the place of all creation.
Searching for the blue past all the rest.

I know I'm not alone.
But how, then, am I lost?
I don't want to roam
to end up where I'll rot.
A head full of this sight
Is all I can see.
The only way to go
Is to lose my body.

A calling to the skies is all this is.
I'm looking through the eyes of the flesh.
I'm trying to find the place of all creation.
Searching for the blue past all the rest.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/blue-skies/#post-14765