https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 02:23:02 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87513 Sun, 30 Jan 2005 21:35:35 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group DillyDally https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87513 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87508 Sun, 30 Jan 2005 20:27:04 +0000
Not a bad start and a good use of imagery. The song progresses well and finishes strongly. I would make a few minor word changes if it was me: :)

A vase full of Crimson
Engulfed in a sea of tears
Time has its effects
Which it mirrors

The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is now wilting

Drop after drop is wasted
Full to the top
To dry at the bottom
No more tears are wasted

The petals are drying
The stem is drooping (or bending) (couldn't quite decide which fitted best here)

The Crimson Petals Fall Off
Never To Show Life Again
One Last Tear Hits The Ground
And No One's Around To Feel It

The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is wilting away

Good stuff :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87508 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87492 Sun, 30 Jan 2005 18:22:39 +0000 really amazing and beautiful, you should be proud.
I'd love to hear it, if you record it.

very well done;)
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87492 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87376 Sat, 29 Jan 2005 17:40:14 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87376 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87351 Sat, 29 Jan 2005 11:04:00 +0000
very nice love some of lyrics espically the first verse


well done

cheers

L.K
:arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-87351 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-6730 Sat, 29 Jan 2005 05:31:00 +0000 Engulfed in the sea of tears
Time has its effects
To which it mirrors

The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is now wilting

Drop after drop was wasted
From full to the top
To dry at the bottom
No more to be wasted

The petals are drying
The stem is sloping

The Crimson Petals All Fall Off
Never Showing Life Again
One Last Tear To Hit The Ground
And No One Around To Feel It

The tears have stopped flowing
The crimson is wilting


* this is so totally random its sickening *]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DillyDally https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/crimson-wilting-week-12-year-3/#post-6730