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Your song reminds me so much of one of mine--I start out with an image of a man walking in circles, thinking he's going home.  Then, in the next verse, a picture of a woman looking through letters, hoping to find an answer, but feeling only regret.  The chorus ties the two people together with a line that goes "how do you forget"and other lines like that.  The third verse is in the first person, with me singing about how I have to remind myself to forget" by tying a string onto my finger.

The key is that it doesn't make sense until the chorus, and the ending just deepens the meaning.I started with the same thing as you, basically, and just went with the imagery.  Let it flow!

S]]> Sunday Songwriters Group spam https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56391 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56390 Thu, 15 Jan 2004 02:22:14 +0000
I wouldn't worry about it.
We all want our songs to be finished ASAP but it's just not the ways it works.
At the risk of talking in cliches, I too have probably 15 unfinished songs lying there, begging to be finished, but I haven't figured out how they will finish.
I have a song idea which I thought I have rewritten at least four times, but I'm still not satisfied with it.

Sometimes you write a song in two minutes, sometimes an idea lies around for half an hour when suddenly you read something, see something and you get the spark: of course! that's how it should be! You wonder why you didn't see before.

You can force yourself to write a song, but these are usually not the best.

When you have six lines like you have, you have to figure out where you will take this song. Are these the starting lines anyway?

Well, that's my advice. Good luck! I know it will work out eventually!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Christiaan https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56390 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56389 Mon, 12 Jan 2004 23:48:04 +0000
Welcome to the Guitarnoise and the SSG it's always good to see a new face. :)

From your post above what you are describing is a writers block which, trust me, happens to us all.  To get through it is all about persistence and asking yourself some pretty simple questions that come out of what you've written.  In the case you've submitted why is this guy crying himself to sleep everynight? What terrible event happened, why couldn't he blame anyone?  Was there anyone else involved?  If so how are they feeling? An easy way to think about it is to write the story then write the song - if you're lucky the song will write itself from the story - if you're like me the story helps you map out the song, provides a theme or plot, gives you imagery and metaphor, gives you a lot of the words you will be able to use in the song it's just that you have to rearrange them.

I have stacks of half written lines/verses/choruses which I can't get around to finish because I don't know the story behind them.  That's the bit I need to work on.  

As a suggestion with your piece look at what you've got written - a verse about a man and half a verse about a child.  So you have man and child what about including a verse about a woman then tying them all together with a chorus that is about life or living that's what it seems to be saying to me.

The best advice I can give is stick at it. Writing songs is like playing the guitar the more you practice the better you get.

Persevere - joining the SSG is a good way to go at it, the people here are friendly and willing to help and we won't brainwash you (well not yet anyway).

Hope to see some more stuff soon.

Bob  :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56389 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56388 Mon, 12 Jan 2004 23:45:48 +0000
first of all i should say you should rather post this on the Guitar song writing club, than the sunday soongwriters group, you may get a lot of really good responses there. This is usually for assigments that come out every sunday for us to rattle our brains to. Should you dare to accept the challenge, you would really enjoy it and I know it has helped me stretch my brain an awful lot.

Now to your lyrics

    I knew a man who cried himself to sleep,
    Thinking about the way his life should be.
    Through it all he'd never blame no one,
    He'd just sit back and let the feelings run.
 
    New to the world this child opens up his eyes,
    Born to live inside of this paradise.

what you have is really very very good, the meter / rhythm is excellent , what you need to do now is follow through with the story. Why did he cry himself to sleep, why did he just sit back,  where was he when he just sat back, what was going through his mind see what I mean ??? Tell me what happens next !!!
I look forward to the next instalment.
Go well and again welcome to our group

Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-56388 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-1646 Mon, 12 Jan 2004 23:15:22 +0000   I seem to come up with some decent little, well I don't know what to call them, but I never seem to know where to go with them.
 For instance I like this little thing here but I can't take it anywhere.

          I knew a man who cried himself to sleep,
        Thinking about the way his life should be.
         Through it all he'd never blame no one,
        He'd just sit back and let the feelings run.

          New to the world this child opens up his eyes,
        Born to live inside of this paradise.


And that's where it goes kapooie. Maybe just a little advice would help, I greatly appreciate it.
  I just started doing some home recording and I just want to write the songs to sound good.
           
                                                Thanx
                                                  Tim]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Satan12 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/dont-know-where-to-go/#post-1646