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I will now and do a google search

( this might get me out of my chords I seem to use all the time )


I like your alterations / suggestions

Appreciate all feed back

Hilch :?:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166325 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166226 Fri, 17 Mar 2006 02:22:16 +0000
Instead of easiest, could you use:

Greatest (you covered that)
Simplest

or change the line like "Your spreading your disease"

Showing no mercy
Giving me cooties
in a hurried frenzy

I use a Online Rhyming Dictionary when I get stuck. Just have to figure out how to make the meter fit.

Great attempt at shaking it up. As far as chords go, why dont you find an online chord encyclopedia and learn a few variations of ones you know. Then try to fit them into the song.

Just a suggestion.

Geoo]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166226 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166214 Fri, 17 Mar 2006 01:28:36 +0000
The topic this week Martin was flying and just want to be original in my work , thought well there are not too many songs out there about those annoying little pests , so this was my oppitunity to get one out there :lol:

Ok Ok the subject matter propably isn't the greatest idea but how many people actually like flies ?

Was going to write " With the greatest of ease " sounded corny to me

I booby trapped this place with infomation I found on a floppy disc didn't seem to that great , so I shortened it ...

Appreciate the comments though ..

Thanks Geoo and Paul

( just wish I could play some different chords other then the same ones I have used before to record it for you's )

Hilch :?:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166214 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166130 Thu, 16 Mar 2006 20:17:52 +0000
I think you were right post it. It is a simple song, but thats not the point, I agree with Martin, his comments and conclusion
But those aside, I think it is fine and shows your writing skills are developing. It flows really well apart from a couple of lines. Thats pretty good in my book.

Well done :D

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166130 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166089 Thu, 16 Mar 2006 17:36:45 +0000 -"I've booby trapped this place with a floppy disc" - wtf?!??!?!?? At work and dont have the time at the moment to write something proper but I think on the disc part he is talking about those flypaper, catcher things.

I like it. But I'll write more later.

Geoo]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166089 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166081 Thu, 16 Mar 2006 17:15:01 +0000
As a song I think it's quite ok. The lines are short and simple, they rhyme, and there's a different bridge/chorus part which is open to interpretation. All good points. There are just a couple of lines I thought were off:

-"with the easiest of ease" - hmm....
-"I've booby trapped this place with a floppy disc" - wtf?!??!?!??

But those aside, I think it is fine and shows your writing skills are developing.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-166081 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-16292 Thu, 16 Mar 2006 14:00:30 +0000
Well I looked around this week and saw One Wing write a very good piece , then The Celt wrote something that brought back alot of memories for me . Then there was alot of songs mentioning actually flying , I thought to myself I have to original here ( One Wing Angel thats originality ).....

Here it is titled

FLY ( not very original )




Stay away from my family home
Stay away from my childrens bed
Don't go near my dogs bone
Did you hear what I said

Filthy little black thing
Buzzing around my food
Be careful when the door bell rings
You have no manners you are so rude

Shoo shoo why don't you
Shoo shoo why don't you


Your nothing but a dirty little fly
I hate you and you know why
Your spreading your disease
With the easiest of ease



Tip toeing around my garbage bins
Never thinking about the moral sins
Your babies are nothing but maggots
Nothing about you amazes us

I have bought lots of insecticide
I keep a can always by my side
Enter at your own risk
I've booby trapped this place with a floppy disc

Shoo shoo why don't you
Shoo shoo why don't you
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Tell me ???? please I'm sort of thinking I should not have posted this at all ...]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/fly/#post-16292