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Nice take on the assignment....different to anything else this week!!!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117771 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117750 Mon, 15 Aug 2005 11:38:36 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117750 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117682 Mon, 15 Aug 2005 03:39:15 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117682 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117677 Mon, 15 Aug 2005 02:51:11 +0000 You have tos actually echo and i wrote in the echoes so its actually only have of what i wrote. I should have written that in. Thanks for the replies.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117677 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117388 Sat, 13 Aug 2005 20:16:45 +0000
I not much of a game person although I was one of the first
of my friends to get Pong when it first come out.
(There I go dating myself agian.)
And I think you might have done a little better on the animal imagery

But I find that your song is well structured with a good rhyme
pattern so I have to say...

Good Job!

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117388 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117123 Fri, 12 Aug 2005 14:55:57 +0000 i really like your song!
i especially like this bit... Destroy me. In the sake of saving your name.
You cannot tame what I have became.
In the wake of what I've laid down before.
And then to ware the title of... but i have to agree with lotto king about the "you have to"s... there may be one to many...
but that's only a possibility...
and its still a really good song!!!
cya!
mary-jane.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group mary-jane https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117123 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117111 Fri, 12 Aug 2005 12:59:32 +0000
As a "Recovering Game Addict" that spoke directly to me. :wink:

Made the old mouse finger twitch something terrible..

wwwadaddsswwda.... no no. be strong.. resist the curse of keyboard and mouse...

get thee behind me beast..... :twisted:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117111 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117109 Fri, 12 Aug 2005 12:41:44 +0000
This is pretty darn good

"Sold my soul, for what, for this skill.
Decieved by what beast gave me my thrill.
My blades, chaotic, blood has been spilled. "

wow that I loved , I only have one part of the song that is troubling me but then again when sung probably is totally ok . But the chorus is what bothers me and the bit that troubles me :

"You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to put me down"

to me it seems far too drawn out ( hope your understanding me )

I think if you leave out You Have to and only sing it 3 times instead of 4 times it works better for me .

But like I said when this is sung by you the way you wrote it then it probably does sound great and terrific.

Well that's this old fellas 10 cents worth

good job pierson :wink:

Cheers

L.K :arrow:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group lotto king https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-117109 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-10894 Fri, 12 Aug 2005 12:17:45 +0000
God Of War

On top of the game and above the rest.
Thousands behind me and killing the best.
Advancing the triumph of great success.
Aided by a power that I must possess.

You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to put me down.
Otherwise I may rise.
You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to
Destroy me. In the sake of saving your name.
You cannot tame what I have became.
In the wake of what I've laid down before.
And then to wear the title of...

Sold my soul, for what, for this skill.
Decieved by what beast gave me my thrill.
My blades, chaotic, blood has been spilled.
Wearing the ashes of the ones that loved me, I have killed.

You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to put me down.
Otherwise I may rise.
You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to
Destroy me. In the sake of saving your name.
You cannot tame what I have became.
In the wake of what I've laid down before.
And then to wear the title of...

Here's my 110 percent, at my peak.
I can't ignore the dead, but I can recsue the weak.
I can blow up and become everything you feared I would be.
I won't slave on my knees, I'd rather die on my feet.
And this power, it glows with my nails in my palms.
Agression handle grip to right what I've done wrong.
And when its done I won't let your body corode and rot.
Your corpse will become my trophy and I will become a god.

You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to put me down.
Otherwise I may rise.
You have to, you have to, you have to, you have to
Destroy me. In the sake of saving your name.
You cannot tame what I have became.
In the wake of what I've laid down before.
And then to wear the title... God of War.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/here-goes-week-40/#post-10894