https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 23:19:26 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195334 Fri, 25 Aug 2006 03:11:32 +0000 But im passin strait through
Still chasin that veil of you]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195334 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195316 Fri, 25 Aug 2006 02:34:09 +0000
And every road leads back to you
But I'm just passing straight on through
Yeah I'm just passing straight on through

Or something like that?

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195316 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195256 Thu, 24 Aug 2006 20:55:09 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/paged/2/#post-195256 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195152 Thu, 24 Aug 2006 12:35:08 +0000
Stick to the original, it had a nice ring to it.

Pete]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Embrace_the_Darkness https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195152 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195109 Thu, 24 Aug 2006 05:20:10 +0000
I forgotten how you felt when you lay close by
When our hands went exploring and we never felt shy
And our smiles never left us as we lay in the dark
Where we promised wed remember and we sealed it with mark

And the road leads back to you
But i'm passin' strait through
And I won't miss my follow through

(I just thought of this third line, not convinced it is better, what do you think?)

And it seems its been a thousand years since last we met
But I can see your smile so clearly now oh how could I forget?
Your so perfect in my memory just the good parts of you
Can I recall, the flaws just fall, and you melt back into view

And the road leads back to you
But I'm passin strait through
And I won't miss my follow through

As time slips by I forget to cry and I am falling through the years
and every thought I have of you I have to stop and feel the pierce
I burned all the pictures in my hands but in my head ones burnin yet
and so I take a moment to myself just to remember to forget

(instrumental)

Cause its always just the same
And im through playin that game
Just cause your play things never change

Doesn't me I can't

Actually im pretty sure I hate that new third line, am I crazy?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195109 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195004 Wed, 23 Aug 2006 18:16:15 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Dneck https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-195004 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194951 Wed, 23 Aug 2006 08:01:10 +0000 I like your song too, Im with the rest with respect to the chorus, and I know what your saying about the repeated words but Im not sure that they work. Maybe something like this:
And the road leads back to you
And though youll see me passing through
Dont believe Im over you just a thought cos I havent heard it yet so it might not fit the music.

Good work here I think

cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194951 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194937 Wed, 23 Aug 2006 05:38:54 +0000
Nice work... lyrically and the recording.

I got stuck on the last line of the chorus also. It's not that it is too simple ( it's a good contrast to the verses ), it just doesn't seem to fit for me. I think what you're after is that you're trying to hint that even though you're not going back, you're still not completely over it. However, the line "don't think I'm through with you", when read as a command to your ex, breaks the melancholy mood of the song and sounds like your going to stop by sometime and give her a piece of your mind ( or worse ). It's always tough trying to come up with a line that cleary shows double-mindedness in the singer, and I think that's why no-one's been able to suggest an alternative for you yet.

Also the part:
You seem so perfect in my memory just the good parts of you
Can I recall, the bad just falls, and leaves my perfect view I love the the concept of these lines, but "good parts" and "the bad" seems a little under-descriptive of the emotions. I always want to know more. Specifically, what bad thing falls away? I'd like it if you would name it instead of just refereing to it.

On the whole, though, great stuff. Keep at it.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194937 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194912 Wed, 23 Aug 2006 02:55:13 +0000
When I say weak I am actually only referring to the last line of the chorus - I know what you're trying to do but I think that last line just doesn't do it IMO. In comparison to the rest of the song, which I think is really good, it's just not there.

I've tried to come up with some suggestions but can't at the moment :oops:

Hope that clears up what I meant.

Bob :wink:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194912 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194831 Tue, 22 Aug 2006 19:56:25 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Off He Goes https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-42-passin-through-new-mp3/#post-194831