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She's always so happy
When her selection arrives
Tossing her hair
And flashing her eyes

I'd substitute the word "choice" for "selection".......or maybe "pick"....

and in this one,

She's got a new man
Every time I turn around
She takes the featured selection
And she wears him right down

I'd substitute something like "dish of the day" for "featured selection".....

Apart from that, it's cool - I see it as a pretty up-tempo song, it's catchy as hell and has a great meter...the only other way you could improve it,
you could maybe change the last chorus to something like

"I couldn't wait to be the featured selection in her man of the month club,
Then the time came for me,
I couldn't wait to be the featured selection in her man of the month club,
Now I'm just another trophy........"

(That was just off the top of my head, you understand, just sort of wraps it all up and finishes the song instead of leaving the listener in limbo.......you could probably do a lot better than my suggestion, given time to work on it...)

:) :) :)

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-70644 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-70614 Sat, 25 Sep 2004 20:40:46 +0000
She's got a new man
I can't wait to be the
Every time I turn around
Featured selection in her
She takes the featured selection
Man of the month club
And she wears him right down...

Or maybe a different chorus with those lines as background and keep the verses as they are. That way you could repeat that section without it getting too repetative.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group nroberts https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-70614 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-70601 Sat, 25 Sep 2004 12:43:53 +0000
I like the approach you took with this one. And I like the way you carried the metaphor throughout the whole song. The only thing that sticks out at me, is that you do the chorus 9 times. Even the catchiest phrase can get old after the 5th pass. Anyways, it's good to see you still popping in from time to time. Now hit the books. :)

-- Scratch 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-70601 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-3975 Sat, 25 Sep 2004 02:42:08 +0000
The Man of the Month Club
Copyright©2004 Martin Hillman

Sitting on a shelf with
Every man who's ever seen her
Vying for position
To be the lucky number

She's always so happy
When her selection arrives
Tossing her hair
And flashing her eyes

Chorus:
And I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

She's got a new man
Every time I turn around
She takes the featured selection
And she wears him right down

Chorus:
And I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

She uses them up
Then she throws them away
Never saves any
For a rainy day

Chorus:
And I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I know it's going nowhere
I know it's just for a day
Still something about her
Makes me want to play

Chorus:
And I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club

I can't wait to be the
Featured selection in her
Man of the Month Club]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maxwell https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-46-the-man-of-the-month-club/#post-3975