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YOU MAKE MY LIFE HARD BABE
YOU CAUSE MY SO MUCH PAIN
YOU MAKE MY LIFE HARD BABE
YOU CAUSE ME SO MUCH PAIN
WHEN I SEE THE LIGHT AT THE END OF THE TUNNEL
IT'S A DAMNED OLD FRIEGHT TRAIN

another line i think I heard from a NPR interview ( A musician was talking about getting back to new Orleans ASAP--" I'll be on the first thing smokin"]]> Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-131176 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-131171 Sat, 08 Oct 2005 18:42:50 +0000

I think the first verse would make a good chorus... something to come back to a couple more times (or maybe even just once more at the end).


I'm guessing there will be some solo work in the song too? Hope we can hear it someday. SP,

Thanks for the comments. I think I agree with you about the first verse being a chorus. May have to do some rewriting here. :D

Oh yeah, If you play along, I left plenty of room for a second guitar to do some soloing etc. Taking the last two songs to my buddy's next time we jam, and see what he can add to them.

My goal is to have a decent mic and start recording some of these by the end of the year. Then I can really torture you folks. :D :twisted:

My main goal was to get a playable set of chords and strumming that would give the listener the feel of an old steam engine rolling. To be honest, I think I accomplished that fairly well. (enough tooting my own horn now) :oops:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group TwistedFingers https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-131171 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-131168 Sat, 08 Oct 2005 18:33:08 +0000
Very nice. It may not be your lyrical high water mark, but there are still some great lines like:
So, I'm hopping on that coal burner tonight. and Gonna ride this train till I run out of track. And the lyrics fit the tone of the song.

I have a couple of suggestions, but first just be aware that I'm not blues. I don't really listen to the blues, and I don't really get 'em, so if my ideas contradict some unwritten blues code of ethics, then just ignore them.

I think the first verse would make a good chorus... something to come back to a couple more times (or maybe even just once more at the end).

If you did go that root, though, I'd change it a bit so that the second line differs from the first (my reason being that if you're going to repeat it throughout the song, you don't want it to repeat itself).

I'm guessing there will be some solo work in the song too? Hope we can hear it someday.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-131168 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130859 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 16:11:18 +0000
Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130859 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130783 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 06:21:57 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group TwistedFingers https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130783 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130782 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 06:19:07 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130782 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130673 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 00:38:53 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group TwistedFingers https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130673 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130661 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 00:21:27 +0000
As for the lyrics, I like them....blues isn't about what you say, it's the way you say it....

Good job...

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130661 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130655 Fri, 07 Oct 2005 00:04:36 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130655 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130621 Thu, 06 Oct 2005 22:22:12 +0000 :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group TwistedFingers https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-48-train-song/#post-130621