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"You do an excellent job mastering rhyming and rhythm patterns. Keep up the good work!"  

Well, first of all, thank you. And I have to say I admire you for being able to spell both correctly and not get confused...as I easily would have....;D. LOL.


-Laura]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BlackSwan https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56229 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56228 Thu, 08 Jan 2004 23:19:08 +0000
Keep up the good work]]> Sunday Songwriters Group P0RR https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56228 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56227 Thu, 08 Jan 2004 22:17:22 +0000
Yeah! I have to agree! I'm impressed! I really liked Just to understand.

"Your lips, your touch, your words, and your trust,
Your heart, your mind, and your deepest lust," - those two long lines invites you to play with. I nearly started to sing when I read them- just to feel them!
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Jonsi https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56227 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56226 Thu, 08 Jan 2004 21:03:41 +0000
In Just To Understand, the last part of the last line did not do it for me. Unfortunately I do not have a good suggestion.

Blessings. Olav
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56226 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56225 Thu, 08 Jan 2004 00:25:53 +0000
Honest Liar: I like the lines, but I don't see why he is an honest liar. It could use some clarification. Maybe you could include a remark like 'He believes what he says'?

Peace,
Chris.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Christiaan https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56225 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56224 Wed, 07 Jan 2004 11:03:12 +0000
- silly putty
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56224 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56223 Tue, 06 Jan 2004 21:28:12 +0000
Good Stuff

Bob  ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56223 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56222 Tue, 06 Jan 2004 10:02:14 +0000
One tiny thing...the first line of your first chorus should be: "He was an honest liar"





]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-56222 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-10-blackswan/#post-1609 Tue, 06 Jan 2004 09:01:48 +0000
He was an honest liar,
With a soul of fire,
His words were alive,
With the pain and desire.
Ooooh, he was an honest liar.

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Just to understand

It pains me, it kills me,
It just plain frustrates me,
It drives me, crazy,
Just to understand!
Your lips, your touch, your words, and your trust,
Your heart, your mind, and your deepest lust,
Just to understand it, what wouldn't I give,
Just to comprehend it, the feelings at risk.



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