https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 21:16:05 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56525 Mon, 02 Feb 2004 05:57:17 +0000 Also, as much as I HATE to be literal, is the title referring to the number of times she has gone back to him? sorry to be so dense, but everything else in the song ties in so well.

I especially like the image you paint of trust and feeling safe.good contrast. Great work!
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]]> Sunday Songwriters Group spam https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56525 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56524 Mon, 02 Feb 2004 05:55:17 +0000 Also, as much as I HATE to be literal, is the title referring to the number of times she has gone back to him? sorry to be so dense, but everything else in the song ties in so well.

I especially like the image you paint of trust and feeling safe.good contrast. Great work!
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]]> Sunday Songwriters Group spam https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56524 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56523 Sun, 01 Feb 2004 23:23:13 +0000
It's not about falling in love frequently and easily.  It's about falling over and over for the same man.  it's about being in an emotionally abusive relationship.  And every time she thinks of leaving, he becomes loving again.

It's about the cycles of love and anger, gentleness and cruelty.  
About what seems like Heaven, spiraling into Hell.  
And ultimately it (will be) about the self-betrayal of staying.

that's what it WILL be.  Obviously not what it is yet.
Thanks again!
Tiger]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56523 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56522 Sun, 01 Feb 2004 05:53:49 +0000
I can't really add much to what Bob said but I do want to say that I hope we get to read a lot more of your material. This is a very promising start!

Peace
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56522 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56521 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 23:44:46 +0000
This is a good start and allow me to officially welcome you to the SSG - glad you stopped by.

I can see where you are trying to go with your piece. It just needs a little bit of thinking about.  Here's how I understand it.

Person falls in love easily and often and does so again believing that this time it's for real.  However, this time turns out to be like all the times before and person is in a situation they've found themselves in a number of times before - their own personal hell.

So trying to keep as much of your submission as possible here's something I knocked up - very quickly so it's nowhere near brilliant but hopefuly you'll get the idea.

You make it feel like Heaven
And the smiles this time are real
My demons gone forever
Cast out by how I feel (not brilliant I know)

And every time I fall
You understand my pain
Warm eyes and gentle kisses
Make me whole again

But it's not long until
This charm loses its spell
And here I am again
In the 7th circle of my Hell

It may be that you can work your piece around with the same idea.  Give yourself a storyline and try and tll that story through the song.  Obviously the more metaphorical you can become then great but don't worry about that just yet try telling the story.

Good start as for diving in - SPLASH - you're wet - welcome. ;)

Bob  ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-56521 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-diving-in/#post-1677 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 20:07:07 +0000
 7th Circle of Hell

I thought I was in Heaven
the smiles this time were real,
the demons gone forever

Every time I fall . . .
warm eyes and gentle words
coax me back again
in your arms I sink
and think this time's for real

I thought I was in Heaven
but gentle words sharpen
warm eyes fade to cold kisses

and here I am
in the 7th circle of Hell again.

:-/

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