https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 00:38:05 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56563 Thu, 05 Feb 2004 00:46:53 +0000 Just finished listening to your MP3,
This is the most professional  and most technically sound recording i have yet to hear here.
It puts across a brilliant  mood for the song, a feeling of being really blue ( midnight blue and sexy definately ),
the only advise I could offer is , some of the lyrics are hard to hear, but you have chosen your backing icredibly well to match the mood, so dunno how you can fix that !!!
Really looking forward to the next one. ::) maybe you'd do me the honour of recording midnight blue, it would suit your voice so well.

Go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56563 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56562 Wed, 04 Feb 2004 10:37:39 +0000
scratch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56562 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56561 Wed, 04 Feb 2004 09:46:04 +0000
Thanks for listening.

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56561 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56560 Wed, 04 Feb 2004 06:44:27 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group arunadawn https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56560 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56559 Tue, 03 Feb 2004 23:09:57 +0000
http://xquake.net/~ebo/kad/which5oclock.mp3

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/paged/2/#post-56559 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56558 Sun, 01 Feb 2004 12:53:28 +0000
-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56558 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56557 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 20:41:00 +0000 Was that intentional??  I LIKED the beep.  I want it back.
To me, the beep is what delivered the power of the last line . . . the message, like the relationship got cut off; with no closure.

and the listener gets sort of 'dropped off' in a new place, like a suddenly dark room feeling their way around, wondering what happened.  

the beep does it for me]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56557 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56556 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 18:31:06 +0000 Go well
Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56556 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56555 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 12:52:29 +0000
I finished up my recording and sent it along to be posted. So it'll be up in um.. however long it takes for it to be available for you ,

Anyway, in just about all the reviews you guys posted.. one word was used fairly often.. "Simple". I realy kept that in mind when i did the music. I also reworked the lyrics a bit so they flowed better. Here's the update there.


"Which 5 O'clock (An Unfinished Thought)"

I'll waste away just thinking about all this
Not even sure which 5 o'clock it is
And I don't know if its off to bed
Or out to face the world instead
I'm wondering is there something that I've missed?

I can't count the days
Since she went away
Haven't slept at all
Or fed myself with anything
More than coffee and nicotine

I must be a sight
Yeah, but that's alright
I broke the mirrors
Didn't care to see me anyway
And I guess she feels the same

So.. (chorus)

And the message left
Cryptic at best
Just makes no sense
"I love you dear, goodbye
And if I'm not back by five"

So.. (chorus)

Is there something that I missed?


              Thank you all for the warm welcome.
-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56555 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-13-which-5-oclock/#post-56554 Sat, 31 Jan 2004 01:20:41 +0000 great work man.  an awesome use of imagery.  complex imagery is great but the most powerful lyrics are simple and still express an intense image and you have definitely accomplished both!

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