https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 07:12:46 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56720 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 22:01:30 +0000 Its really great to get some feedback about a song and it can be difficult to  look objectively at your own work and decide which lines or verses are the best.
I think I'll try recording a couple of versions myself and seeing which sounds the best but if you suggest the alternative verse then I probably will use it.
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56720 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56719 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 21:45:10 +0000
Personally, I would use your alternative verse in place of verse two.  It doesn't convey the idea that he's asking for help, like your current v2 does, but it does speak of his decision and the reasons behind it, and the chorus does a good job of expressing his desire for some help in the decision.  I really like your alternative.  If you decide to keep vs. 2, I would fit the altenate in there somewhere.  Maybe between 2 & the last verse.  The last verse is also very well done, by the way.   I love the symbology you've used in 3 repetitions of 7.

Thanks,  this is a really good song.  I'm glad to have read it.

Scratch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56719 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56718 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 18:12:38 +0000 I just noticed the fact that the first verse has less lines.
In fact when I sing it the 3rd line of the first verse actually takes up 2 lines.
For me the most important verse in the song is the second one -from the point of view of telling a short story- and I'm still not convinced I've really captured the moment of a man asking his wife to help him die.
I was toying with an alternative verse.

I lie beside you in the fading light
Can't bear to let you see me lose the fight
Help me put on my clothes and
Remember me in those
I'll slip away when I've wished you goodnight

maybe I should put it in as well or maybe that would make the whole thing a bit sickly sweet.
I suspect the song is better without it but I'm grateful for any suggestions
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56718 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56717 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 13:36:56 +0000
I really like this. There's a small issue with the first verse having 4 lines and the others having 5. But then the four line bit could just be an intro type thing. So its not a big deal. This seems very heartfelt. It does have sort of a gospel flavor to it lyrically. Not in a traditional gospel sense but more in a soulful U2 kinda way.

The line "You always were the one that could be brave "
Feels a little odd to me. But that could just be me.

In any case. Good work.

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56717 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56716 Fri, 13 Feb 2004 13:22:34 +0000
ANGEL ROAD

I wake up in the same town every day
And every stone and stair remains the same
Every time I cough it reminds me what I've lost
I've no-one but myself left to blame

Chorus
Put my feet on that angel road
There's only one direction left to go
I could use a little help now
To lift my heavy load
Put my feet on that Angel Road

I've been with you all my happy days
You always were the one that could be brave
But the needle's not as long
As the time that I'll be gone
I hope that you can lift me on my way

chorus

There's seven men in black praying over me
And seven ravens watching from the trees
In seven days the world was made
But sooner I'll have raised
My feet on that Angel Road

chorus.

I would love to hear what you think about this song. I really feel like I put alot of myself into this one.
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56716 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56715 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 23:07:50 +0000
I just want to add my accolades to those of Bob and SP. What you've posted is very well done, as SP noted, the rhythm flows well and it's a song that offers hope at a time when people may feel helpless.  When I read the chorus it reminds me of Southern Gospel.  I hope you can post the rest soon, I'm looking forward to seeing the finished work.

--Scratch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56715 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56714 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 06:22:14 +0000
Wow, I really like it so far. It has a nice, easy rhythm. It does sound uplifting and spiritual (helped by the "angel" road). Like Bob, I like the repetition of that line in the chorus.

I look forward to reading the rest!

- SP]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56714 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56713 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 00:48:55 +0000
Good stuff

Bob  :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56713 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56712 Tue, 10 Feb 2004 18:36:29 +0000
I wake up in the same town every day
And every stone and stair remains the same
Every time I cough it reminds me what I've lost
I've no-one but myself left  to blame

chorus
Put my feet on that angel road
There's only one direction left to go
I could use a little help now
To lift my heavy soul
Put my feet on that angel road

I'm not sure if it works repeating the line in the chorus but I couldn't think of anything else.
p.s. you should know that in Scotland a stair is a group of tenement flats all reached from the same staircase.
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-56712 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-1725 Tue, 10 Feb 2004 16:06:07 +0000 In my line of work I meet alot of people who are dying and sometimes in those last few weeks you can develop quite a profound and memorable relationship with them.
Occasionally you meet somebody who wants to die in their own way and at the time of their choosing.
I want to write a song about a man dying of lung cancer who asks his wife to help lift him up from the world that is hurting him too much.
The first verse will be about his sadness at dying.
He sees the world carrying on around him but he knows his time is done.
In the next verse we discover how much he loves his wife and he asks her to help him
In the final verse we see the priest praying over him.
The chorus will be an uplifting request to help him onto the 'Angel Road'
I see it being a fairly up beat song despite the content and it should have a positive vibe.
I'll post the first verse and chorus soon.
Beren]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Beren https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-15-angel-road/#post-1725