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I know the metering isn't correct - I am kind of backwards as I write the lyrics with no idea of a tune for it - I am not at the point of writing musical scores.

Thanks for the idea Geoffrey on the chorus line.

I appreciate you both spending the time to review and comment.

BS :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob Squires https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-92078 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-92075 Wed, 02 Mar 2005 06:19:53 +0000
the only thing i would suggest is changing

"This song is not intended to be sad –"
to
"This is not intended to be sad"

i don't like how the song is aware of itself, or how you're aware that you're writting it. It really should be a thought process with the music being the environment, not a subject. BUT that's a pretty small thing. if it fits the vocal melody better, it's no big deal.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoffrey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-92075 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-91987 Tue, 01 Mar 2005 20:43:32 +0000
Good work. I like the way you use nature as a comparison to our own lives. Love the chorus. The only thing is the meter of the verses seems a little off to me. Maybe it could a little tightening up. Then again I don't know what you have in mind for music so I could be way off base. It just didn't flow well as I read it.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-91987 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-7384 Sun, 27 Feb 2005 17:47:32 +0000
Thank you in advance for taking the time to review.

Bob Squires
:)


Over Life's Fields
By B. Squires

Verse 1
I look out over the fields
Spot a doe and fawn
I think of the cycle of life
- How soon they will be gone

I look upon my face
And see how it relates
This mortals' cycle of life
- How we share the same fate

Verse 2
So late at night when we rest
I need to hold you so near
Not to bother you or suffocate
Just make best use of time my dear

Sharing our life over the years
Our love is truly full-grown
A love that has infinite depth
Joining our spirits so we're never alone

Chorus
This song is not intended to be sad –
Just to reflect on our life the fun we had
Focus on our future and what we must do
To enjoy life's field before it's through

Verse 3
This true slice of heaven
My earthly time with my wife
Not knowing when it will end
Sharing the same fate as all life

Now that the years have slide by
We are in our autumn years
We will continue to grow
Helping each to live without any fears

Verse 4
I look in your familiar eyes
I see the joy and always smile
Hopeful that our life's journey will
Keep clicking over many more miles

When the end of our time comes
And the reaper appears
I'll end this life's cycle with you …
My partner, my friend, my dear

Chorus
This song is not intended to be sad –
Celebrate our life the fun we have
Focus on our future and what we must do
To enjoy life's field before it's through]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob Squires https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-lifes-fields/#post-7384