SSG Week 17 - The Subtle Knife - Sunday Songwriters Group https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-the-subtle-knife/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 21:31:33 +0000 wpForo 60 Re: SSG Week 17 - The Subtle Knife https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-the-subtle-knife/#post-56858 Tue, 24 Feb 2004 22:48:24 +0000 I like your thought pattern here, but i think the song could be condensed somewhat.
( i don't think I have commented on your songs before, you will find I don't do long songs and so this is a normal comment of mine )

This is what i mean........

knife of doubt, always there,
Enters my spirit in the night,
she runs, she charges,lunges and cuts
To face the next day, finish the  fight, .

subtle knife slips in deep
Chasing courage, chasing sleep,
confidence now shattered and gone
My strength , gone, I'm weak

etc... etc... etc...
this way it is a lot more poignant ( just my personal opinion hey  and I'm no expert ??? )

Go well
Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-the-subtle-knife/#post-56858 SSG Week 17 - The Subtle Knife https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-17-the-subtle-knife/#post-1753 Sun, 22 Feb 2004 22:48:52 +0000
This is called “The Subtle Knife”.

The book is by Phillip Pullman.



The knife of doubt, always there, always threatening
Enters my spirit in the night, she runs and she charges,
She lunges and cuts
To face the next day, to fight, takes all my might.

The subtle knife slips in deep
Chasing away courage, chasing away sleep,
My confidence gone
My confidence shattered
My strength to the world is battered.

I cannot go on, I cannot push through this
I must for the future, but doubt cuts me through.
This sport is killing, the torment of the game, is a tightrope.
My balance is failing me again.

The subtle knife slips in deep
Chasing away courage, chasing away sleep,
My confidence gone
My confidence shattered
My strength to the world is battered.

Tomorrow will come and I must face my fears.  
The option of failure raises with me, to back down from challenge is easy again.
But today I will fight and today I will win.
The victory, I can feel it.  
This will be my day


Tell me what you think guys  ???,

See ya

Jez'
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