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instead of "The angel wings nailed to her back
Make it hard for her to relax"

maybe.. "the weight tied to her ballet feet
make it hard for her to sleep"

or... "her head so full what's the come
makes her pigtails pop undone"

"all the decorations break off when
her datebooks filled up to the brim"

"and the top is sprinkled with unfinished things
she wants to choose her exile in ice cream"

the last one was just for kicks. but i don't know.. poetry is hard]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-56929 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-56928 Sat, 06 Mar 2004 03:43:39 +0000
Also...do you have a suggestion for what I can use instead of "angel wings"?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-56928 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-56927 Fri, 05 Mar 2004 07:24:57 +0000
i don't remember that movie, so i can't help there. but you're poem just describes her.. it doesn't pass any judgement or make any insightfull revelation. so it's not fair to say this is bad, but i'm not drawn in and after reading it i'm not changed. but since i didn't think the movie was worth remembering.. i guess maybe i'm just totally uninterested in this character. stop listening to me.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-56927 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-1771 Thu, 04 Mar 2004 08:42:03 +0000
"Fallen Angel"

V1
She wipes the sleep from her eyes
And kicks the covers away
To leave her bed of paradise
And start a hellish day

CHORUS
The angel wings nailed to her back
Make it hard for her to relax

She'll never feel what it is to live
She only knows what it is to give

V2
Cupcakes she made the night before
Sit on her countertop
She wishes that she could have made more
But there's no time to stop

CHORUS

V3
The clothes she'll wear lay on her bed
Planned out to a tee
Perfection looms above her head
It's all she wants to be

CHORUS

V4
She can't stay at this break-neck pace
Her world will soon cave in
What she worked for will erase
She's only a human being

CHORUS]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-18-fallen-angel/#post-1771