https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 11:32:19 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98211 Wed, 13 Apr 2005 20:31:28 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98211 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98016 Tue, 12 Apr 2005 19:03:24 +0000
don't see it metal... rather gothic or acoustic/depressive/resigned/desperate/emotional. little instruments, song carried by the voice.

anyways, I think this could even stand as it is(although after reading the beginning of the song I would've agreed on the straightforward thing).....
I really love the parts where the person and the voices are and also the last line. like the sarcasm.

curious to see what else you will come up with.
bluenightangel I think you hit the genre here, Bluenightangel.. I was thinking of a really sparse arrangement with a single guitar and cello, maybe some contrabass. But definetly held up by the vocals. I better start recording some of these when I get all my gear set up, which will (hopefully) be soon.

I was watching a video clip of the song "Anna begins" by Counting Crows on VH-1 just recently and it was kind of half-improvisation (Especially in the vocal department) but they just captured the sound I want out of this one so perfectly. Ah, I wish I had a voice like Adam Duritz.

I'm having some trouble rewriting it, though. Everything else I come up with just sounds so out of place and I'm not even one of those people who thinks that the first draft is sacred. But I don't know. I'm gonna just take a break from it and look at it at the end of the week and see if something comes up.

Again, thanks for all the feedback.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Illicit https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98016 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98012 Tue, 12 Apr 2005 18:52:14 +0000
don't see it metal... rather gothic or acoustic/depressive/resigned/desperate/emotional. little instruments, song carried by the voice.

anyways, I think this could even stand as it is(although after reading the beginning of the song I would've agreed on the straightforward thing).....
I really love the parts where the person and the voices are and also the last line. like the sarcasm.

curious to see what else you will come up with.
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-98012 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97980 Tue, 12 Apr 2005 16:38:32 +0000
Brave appraoch to a very hard subject.

I like the way yuo bring the "voices'' into it without really saying that's what they are.
I have made up my mind,
Or rather, they've made it up for me
But I agree Good stuff.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97980 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97793 Mon, 11 Apr 2005 02:35:10 +0000 Wait for this river to take me away,
I wish I'd built me a raft of God's words,
I've only got myself and them now,
But they're no help


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i really like this bit of the song i'm not sure why i just do. i agree with the dude who said if you rework it post it. The song seems like a metal song i maybe wrong but it would work as metal.I would love to hear it recorded.

keep up the good work illicit :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jadiny https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97793 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97784 Mon, 11 Apr 2005 00:27:08 +0000
I'm gonna try polishing it a little later this week.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Illicit https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97784 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97773 Sun, 10 Apr 2005 22:49:48 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group redrider https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97773 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97771 Sun, 10 Apr 2005 22:42:20 +0000 That friendly shores will welcome my soul
This river runs red and I turn numb
I pray that this river won't swallow me whole I loved that. The song didn't read like a song, but I know from experience that songs are way different when they are put to a beat. I hope we'll get to listen to this one!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pierson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-97771 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-8348 Sun, 10 Apr 2005 19:46:39 +0000 Nothing left to do, even less to say,
This red river flows and washes me away

"Gently", they say, "It won't hurt"
I wish I could believe them, but I can't,
Yet they insist

Gently, it flows - as drops to the earth,
Smooth and elegant as violin bows
On my wrist

I have made up my mind,
Or rather, they've made it up for me
But I agree

And now this river runs red and washes me away,
Nothing left to do, I've got nothing more to say,
Still this river flows, washing me away

"Sleep", they say, "Just go to sleep"
I pray to myself that they're right
Now I've got faith

"Sleep", they say, "No need to weep"
It's funny, I was never religious
And now it's too late

I close my eyes and wait,
Wait for this river to take me away,
I wish I'd built me a raft of God's words,
I've only got myself and them now,
But they're no help

And I need help

This river runs red and I can only hope,
That friendly shores will welcome my soul
This river runs red and I turn numb
I pray that this river won't swallow me whole

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Late entry and I'm a little disappointed with this one. I've could have gotten more out of this story, but this will do until I've got the time to go back and have a look at it.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Illicit https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-22-river-runs-red/#post-8348