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Nice Job! You presented the story well and made good use of the assigned words. A possible title could simply be "The Race" as that appears to be the central theme.

Keep up the good work

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-101053 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-100853 Wed, 04 May 2005 06:50:43 +0000 Id change the landscape change the race
Id change the way we live It's very over-the-top in a John Donne sort of way, and communicates the depth of the feeling through hyperbole.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group SlowPlay https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-100853 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-100841 Wed, 04 May 2005 05:50:51 +0000
I really like The one thing that I cannot change
Is the thing you cannot give As I was reading along this part really seemed to stick out to me. I guess we've all been there. Maybe that's why? Great job for a hard week. G. PS. there all hard to me, haha. Forgive me for not being a better critic, hopefully I'll get better!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group rocketgirl https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-100841 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-8828 Wed, 04 May 2005 05:16:50 +0000
The Race
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The race was over from the start
Although I didn't know
Deliberate robotic each step precise
Your focus on the line

How could I compete the job came first
There were no runners up
The Corporate world seduced you well
Left me to run behind

You said you raced to prove yourself
You said you raced for me
Where are you now
Where are we now
Our wandering hearts race separately

Id change the landscape change the race
Id change the way we live
The one thing that I cannot change
Is the thing you cannot give

You said you raced to prove yourself
You said you raced for me
Where are you now
Where are we now
Our wandering hearts race separately]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-week-26-the-race/#post-8828