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I could see this done very slowly with minimal backing, something in the style of Peter Gabriel's "Don't give up"....

Nice work, Karla!!!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-110003 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-109989 Wed, 06 Jul 2005 23:57:07 +0000
yeah good start. What I like about this song is this the way you develop the characters from childhood to adulthood, and how each has its own version of poverty. Having a boy and girl is nice balance and bringing them together in the last verse works well. Good work :D , I look forward to seeing the final version.

pb]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-109989 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-109767 Tue, 05 Jul 2005 17:44:40 +0000

Good start,

The verses could use a little fleshing out but I like the
way you handled the subject. Don't change a bit of what
I'm reading as the chorus;
don't close your eyes
but make it happen
you can make a difference
start showing that you care That is Great

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-109767 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-10023 Mon, 04 Jul 2005 14:11:46 +0000

there is a girl
lying on the floor
unable to walk
she's 5 years of age

there is a boy
walking down the street
with his belly thick
maybe he should eat?

don't close your eyes
but make it happen
you can make a difference
start showing that you care

now if that girl
manages to grow up
she's got miles to walk
only for some water

for the boy the same
once he is some older
there won't be a school
or another chance to grow

don't close your eyes
but make it happen
you can make a difference
start showing that you care

that boy and girl
don't stand a chance
on their own
but together
we can give them a life

don't close your eyes
but make it happen
you can make a difference
start showing that you care

it's only a rough draft, and titelless, but I'm going on vacation tomorrow so it had to be done today. I'll work it out once I'm back :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-wk-35/#post-10023