https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 01:45:49 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372161 Sun, 29 Jan 2012 05:50:29 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372161 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372160 Sun, 29 Jan 2012 05:27:36 +0000 Andy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372160 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372086 Fri, 27 Jan 2012 07:41:35 +0000 Thanks, that was fun writing to and singing over Nick's guitar playing, it's not a guitar track that I would have come up with. It definitely needs some work and appreciate the suggestions but I really like the feel of it. I had actually first written the chorus not repeating the chorus, but felt like repeating when singing over the guitar track :P , I may just edit it out or write more detail if I can work something in that adds to the song.
Andy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372086 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372070 Thu, 26 Jan 2012 21:55:58 +0000 I especially enjoyed the chorus (?) elements. I thought they dovetailed beautifully with the music.

It brought to mind R Crumb's short animation, A Short History of America. Don't know if you've seen it?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3ym5n-ZZWUs

They always tell lyric writers to bring specifics. Crumb brings the details!

Again, really enjoyed your take on Nick's, er, 'track'. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group boxboy https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372070 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372058 Thu, 26 Jan 2012 16:13:05 +0000
Nice job....I like it :D I almost chose this sound clip as well, so now I'm glad I didn't, but then again it would have been an interesting comparison. I definitely didn't have a train in mind for this music, but what you did fits well. The wording was a bit rough in some parts, but more likely due to being a freshly written song.

Suggestion:
Repeating this section makes it feel a bit redundant.
Consider foreshadowing the changes meaning the end of the black train, or maybe spread out the lines and sprinkle in some instrumental phrases.

Thanks for sharing. That was fun to listen to. And kudos to Nick as well-catchy guitar riff at the intro and nice arpeggio section as well.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-372058 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-42290 Thu, 26 Jan 2012 07:16:09 +0000
Andy

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=1228093&songID=11392995

Black train, rolled on by, Black train rolled on by
Steel rails whistled high, as the black train rolled on by
as the black train rolled on by

First came the automobiles on the roads
then the cities along all the paved byways
Then came the truck routes for heavy loads
People and freight driving interstate highways
First came the automobiles on the roads
then the cities along all the paved byways
Then came the truck routes for heavy loads
People and freight driving interstate highways

Black train, rolled on steel, Black train rolled on steel,
Steel rails hum the feel, as the black train rolled on steel,
as the black train rolled on steel,

First came the automobiles on the roads
then the cities along all the paved byways
Then came the truck routes for heavy loads
People and freight driving interstate highways
First came the automobiles on the roads
then the cities along all the paved byways
Then came the truck routes for heavy loads
People and freight driving interstate highways

Black train, rolls no more, Black train rolls no more
Steel rails back to ore, as the black train rolls no more
as the black train rolls no more
as the black train rolls no more]]> Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y10-w13-black-train/#post-42290