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Start to think what tomorrow holds
You care, but there's no worry
It's a picture perfect snapshot of
A life that I once lived

You're still holding on to the A chord, and variation of it; I'd treat it more as a pre-chorus; I'm expecting chord changes there that don't come. it just doesn't work for me, musically - that's where you should be introducing some variation. I'd suggest going to D7 in the first line and seeing where that leads you....musically, the rest of the song's a good match for the lyrics.

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320351 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320271 Sun, 01 Feb 2009 05:53:05 +0000
I think I found a way vocally (well, as vocally as I can do) to change that verse, and I want to change the words in the end

"It's a picture perfect snapshot of a life that I still live -- change first one to life I want to live.
It's a picture perfect snapshot of a life that I still live

Appreciate the input!]]> Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320271 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320224 Sat, 31 Jan 2009 20:53:26 +0000
Thanks for giving your perspective.

I think the vox sound better. Nice job.

I think the verse you want to tighten up is okay. I get it and it makes sense and graduating is closure.

Ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320224 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320123 Fri, 30 Jan 2009 09:01:09 +0000
I gotta say that I think I differed when I was younger, I didn't really worry about anything, still don't, and that drives my wife absolutely crazy :lol: . Which I think is why I thought the change made more sense from the "adult perspective" of the song.

http://www.box.net/shared/sy5xxzdfo7 is where the version is that I just recorded.

I tried to take your advice with the vocals against the verse, I tried to slow it down a bit, let the guitar lead the vocals. I also tightened up the chords against the bridge.

The only thing that's still picking at me that I don't think is quite right is

"you toss your cap
are head of the class
you think that you're so big"

I want to have that part come to a close, but it just doesn't flow right for me, any thoughts from anyone?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320123 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320111 Fri, 30 Jan 2009 05:05:38 +0000
I like the chorus a lot. Big strummy chords and the chorus says "BAM!". Nice.

I hate to throw a wrench into the works but when I was younger I worried a lot. It was only after 40 that I started to relax and not get worked up about stuff. It's not that I don't care it's more like acceptance of the human condition and then gratitude for the time I have with those I care about because at any moment.....ZIP!!!!.

But then again I am a perpetual bachelor. :lol:

ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/paged/2/#post-320111 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320110 Fri, 30 Jan 2009 04:40:49 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320110 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320042 Thu, 29 Jan 2009 12:28:33 +0000
The earlier verses were in the past, the last is in the present, but still looking forward as they won't last forever, maybe it's not as clear as I think it is and I need to re-work things.
These are all definite blessings, but no one can claim them as rites or guarantees. All we really have in this life is the present. Sorry if I am coming across too heavy...It's really one of those ideas you only get by going through it....For example, talking about being married vs. being married, talking about having kids vs. having kids. I agree completely with you, the future isn't set in stone and you have to live in the present and take what you have today as a blessing.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320042 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320041 Thu, 29 Jan 2009 12:21:46 +0000
It's fine if you have something else in mind.

I just thought it fit better with your last section because I thought you meant "today" when you wrote/sang

These days won't last forever
Hold them close while you still can
It's a picture perfect snapshot of
A life that I still live
It's a picture perfect snapshot of
A life that I still live.

Again, it is a different philosophy, but my assumption is anyone who has really had to come to terms with death would see the future as quite fragile.

We make a lot of assumptions or expectations in the absence of death in our lives. For example a man might say, "I am a father of a new born. Of course I am going to watch her graduate, walk her down the aisle, play with my grand kids someday in the future."

These are all definite blessings, but no one can claim them as rites or guarantees. All we really have in this life is the present. Sorry if I am coming across too heavy...It's really one of those ideas you only get by going through it....For example, talking about being married vs. being married, talking about having kids vs. having kids.

I am fine if you leave it...it's your song...just trying to give something to chew on.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320041 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320038 Thu, 29 Jan 2009 11:41:16 +0000
"It doesn't matter what tomorrow holds" -- At that age tomorrow is so far away, and there's so much time it doesn't matter.

"Start to think what tomorrow holds" -- You're past your high school days, what does Tomorrow hold, what journey will you take?

"All that matters is what tomorrow holds" -- What is your child going to be, what dreams, what hopes, etc.

Thank you for the suggestions though, I see what you are saying, but I don't know if it would work.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320038 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320037 Thu, 29 Jan 2009 11:18:55 +0000
Sounding good. :note2:

Suggestion:

How about a bit more "Carpe diem" philosophy? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Carpe_diem

changing
Start to think what tomorrow holds
to
Start to think what today holds

All that matters is what tomorrow holds
to
All that matters is what today holds

Good work! :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w13-lifes-snaphot-joe-hempel-mp3-full/#post-320037