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Intention: Strictly goofy fun . . . any meaning is unintentional]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314244 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314173 Wed, 19 Nov 2008 18:00:31 +0000
Nick has a point (doesn't he always!) with "show me, don't tell me" - if you can paint a picture with your lyrics, the listener wil be drawn in. Maybe you should ask yourself, "what's my target audience? who am I pitching this song to?" then when you've got that straight, you can tailor the lyics to that audience.

As you say, there's potential there - but what do words mean to YOU? Are they a means to have a little goofy fun, or to get a serious point across, or both?

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314173 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314164 Wed, 19 Nov 2008 17:10:54 +0000 OK, so it's like moving furniture around . . .
make it more comfortable . . . to read or listen to . . .
bring some order to the chaos . . . "lower the entropy", as we say
And the "lots of words to paint a picture" was in reference to "a thousand words"
I'll use your revised verse . . . and rearrange the verses in some type of logical order.

TY]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314164 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314159 Wed, 19 Nov 2008 16:37:58 +0000
You've got three verses that start:

Words can
or
Words are

Two that mention prefix, and the rest are random.

It reads like a collection of couplets rather than a song. You have some good lines and rhymes in there, but they're lost without a consistent structure. I mean one thing a song does is generate familiarity and expectation for the listener. I'm not getting that here.

It is a good start.

Two more things, I'm sure you've heard it said around here, "Show don't tell". A lyric should paint an emotional connecting picture for the listener. Give them a mental image they can connect to. So for this verse line two can be a quote of you speaking:

Words can be used to feed you
"Dominos, can I get a large pizza?"
Lots are needed to paint a picture
like Leonardo's Mona Lisa

Because just about everyone has ordered a pizza and can connect to the image.

Then I'd change the Mona Lisa line. How many words is a picture worth? Isn't it a thousand? Yep, googling it reveals "A picture is worth a thousand words"

Words can be used to feed you
"Dominos, can I get a large pizza?"
You need a thousand to paint a picture
like Leonardo's Mona Lisa

just my 2 cents]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-314159 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-34066 Tue, 18 Nov 2008 19:59:27 +0000
I had no trouble with writing lyrics . . .
haven't even started thinking about what kind of tune to put it to.

As usual, I took the path of silly . . . lots of room and potential for more . . . but enough (you'll see)
The verses should be in some type of order but I have no clue.
I'll save this on my hard drive and come back to it someday . . . and groan.

Words Can Do a Lot

Words are used with music
to give meaning to a song
or to invite the listener
to simply sing along

Words can be used to feed you
I use them to order pizza
Lots are needed to paint a picture
like Leonardo's Mona Lisa

Stick a prefix like non- in front
and the meaning changes a lot
Like noncommittal means
commital it is not

Or put the prefix pre- in front
and it means what came before
For example, prenuptial means
what was before the war

They can be contracted
so will not becomes won't
Can not shrinks to can't
and do not shrivels to don't

The letters can be rearranged;
Then it's an anagram
The word maps, for instance,
scrambled it becomes spam

Dirty words can be employed
to produce something obscene
Replace those words to censor
and try to make it clean

Words can get you women
if you learn some tricks
I like to use one-liners
to pick up bar room chicks

Use words to make poems
Choose words that rhyme
Although it's not necessary
to do it every single time
(to do it . . . always :roll: )

A few words can make a sentence
Use even more to write a book
Use words to write a recipe
to tell someone how to cook


Had enough? :mrgreen:

Chorus?
Ohhhhhhhh,
Sticks and stones
may break your bones
But these words
only make for groans
These words will only
make for groans


KR2]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-y7w3-kr2/#post-34066