https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 01:51:46 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209222 Tue, 14 Nov 2006 22:52:34 +0000
I'll think of your suggestion Vic, and thanks.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209222 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209141 Tue, 14 Nov 2006 12:54:52 +0000
I just wonder, in keeping with the imagery, if "En Route" might be a slightly better title? Seems less direct than "The Route" - and might just get the reader thinking, "Hmm, en route to where, exactly?"

Anyway, welcome to the forum - excellent first effort!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209141 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209102 Tue, 14 Nov 2006 06:19:13 +0000
I am glad to see that it took a bit of thinking for some of you to figure out what the song was about. I didn't want to spell it out for my audience; I'd hate for people to have to think less! By the same token, I'm glad you all got it; I didn't want this to be a Dylan-esque style.

pbee: Given what I have just told, would you still recommend expanding on what I mean? IF so, do you have a suggestion on what it should be?

As for what music: if I were to write it, it would be an acoustic song. Pretty dark, maybe Pink Floyd-ish? Though I could see it being a very awesome power/adventure metal song. But I have neither the gear nor the skills to creat a song of that type.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209102 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209077 Tue, 14 Nov 2006 02:49:00 +0000
Took me a couple of reads to get what you were refering to.
Once I did though I understood fully.

Good Job

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209077 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209073 Tue, 14 Nov 2006 02:40:46 +0000
Its' always nice to see new faces / names joining in the fun ..

The chorus is terrific well done there mate ..

Nice

Hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209073 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209029 Mon, 13 Nov 2006 21:59:37 +0000 welcome to the forum. I like youre song, I can certainly relate to it, I was thinking about doing a commute song myself, isnt it funny how everybody sits in the same place everyday. It took me a couple of reads to realise the freezing pole was the Bus stop as I had a commuter train in my head, I wonder if elaborating on that in terms of what it is, might be worthwhile, but keep the obelisk / tower metaphore.
I think this is an excellent song well done, what kind of music did you have in mind ?

cheers

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-209029 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-21817 Mon, 13 Nov 2006 21:03:29 +0000
edit: Title courtesy of Vic Lewis

En Route

I wake under darkened skies
It’s a struggle
It’s a fight
To rise after the night

Go to a freezing pole
An obelisk
A tower
Critical is the hour

Oh that caravan whisks me away!
Its filled with wretched souls
The sheep, the masses
I step on to join the fray

The same routine
Day in
Day out
All to get about

A grim troll
A mother
A senior
There are only two doors

Oh that caravan whisks me away!
Its filled with wretched souls
The sheep, the masses
I step on to join the fray

And time travels so slowly
And the carriage man smiles grimly
Knowing he keeps us from our destination

Oh that caravan whisks me away!
Its filled wretched souls
The sheep, the masses
I step on to join the fray]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DrunkRock https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-year-5-week-2-en-route/#post-21817