https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 23:00:29 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273585 Sat, 08 Dec 2007 16:52:05 +0000
but in the firelight, feelings I once knew
stir again, so warm like mulled wine]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Raystrack https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273585 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273576 Sat, 08 Dec 2007 14:54:36 +0000 I think the last line could be tweaked as it suggests feelings that are more painful than beautiful

How about...

but in the firelight, feelings I once knew
stir inside, warming me like hot mulled wine

. . . or something

anyway - beautiful job :wink:

cheers
Ola]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Montezuma https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273576 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273398 Thu, 06 Dec 2007 22:19:13 +0000
New beginnings, hopes of love sprung new
are themes for songs in the Springtime
but in the firelight, feelings I once knew
stir me up / burn again like hot mulled wine

bit sloppy?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Raystrack https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273398 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273380 Thu, 06 Dec 2007 19:41:33 +0000 Very evocative I love the winter imagery.

Its only the last verse i think slightly lets it down. We have three verses conjuring up the winter atmosphere then in the last verse you are introducing the idea of a convivial time making music indoors with friends, plus a hint of love interest. Perhaps you could add a verse and give the two themes a bit more space.

Lovely though

Ola]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Montezuma https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-273380 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-29252 Thu, 06 Dec 2007 00:11:35 +0000
Beautiful

November, looking back
seeing all things clear
standing at the gates of the Winter
Summer's memories fading with the light
close to friends on lengthening nights

Beautiful, beautiful
everything beautiful

Scarfed against the cold breeze
I watched the wood smoke curl
up from the fires in the gardens
prickly creatures rolled for their long sleep
underground and all's complete

Chorus

Cobwebs in the dewed grass
dripping crimson thorns
glistening along the canal path
frost-encrusted ditches splinter at my feet
everything is beautiful

Chorus

And in the humour
and warmth and well-fed friends
we play our songs in the evenings
I watched her stand and smile a little shy but strong
everything was beautiful

Chorus]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Raystrack https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg-yr6-wk5-beautiful/#post-29252