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James thanks for that

Paul :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377568 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377537 Fri, 24 Aug 2012 15:17:00 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377537 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377534 Fri, 24 Aug 2012 12:25:33 +0000
Regarding "Cool Water", I don't remember hearing it directly, but maybe Bugs Bunny singing it, or maybe on the TV. It reminds me of the kind of shows my parents would have on while we were growing up.......thanks for the link :wink:

I did have an idea that I could put a group of these songs together and call the album/cd "This song is a joke!" :P


Very Americana-ish. Kinda reminds of a some of Greg Brown's songs, and the crowd I jam with here :) I generally like the way it flows, a few lead runs may augment. It seems to work to only have one aspect of the song be the focus; either the lyrics, beat, or music.....they all need to hold their own, but probably one should be the focus so as not to overload the listener...just a thought....then again, what guitarist turns down a chance to throw in a few lead runs? :wink:
I am wondering about the "are these plates really clean?" hook. It's kind of awkward with the sung emphasis on "these" the first time and "really" the second time. I'm not a grammar expert but it seems the singers concern is with the plate with his food on it. Maybe something like "Is it clean?" and/or"Is this clean"? Maybe add some repetition. Took three listens to (I think) get the dog reference. Still not sure. Just my 2 cents worth of comments, use what helps. :D I'll think on this a bit to see if there might be some phrasing that helps the clarity of the message.....don't count on many revisions soon...... I'll be playing single parent for a while as my wife is out of the country visiting her mother (for possibly the last time as she, my mother-in-law, is in ICU with siroccos of the liver)

Thanks for the feedback on what worked and didn't for you. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377534 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377514 Fri, 24 Aug 2012 01:25:36 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377514 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377494 Thu, 23 Aug 2012 19:55:47 +0000
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RxAQwMNXlic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377494 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377465 Thu, 23 Aug 2012 02:25:05 +0000
I was having a bit of trouble getting focused this week. This was a joke my mom emailed me yesterday.

Other ideas I was trying were:

#1
Second Hand - like on a clock or spiritual presence, or something being used, or children getting in the way of the couple, or an affair

#2
Couch surfing- I just heard of the concept yesterday, but a couch could be the thing or focus of the song....and could make for interesting stories]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377465 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377451 Wed, 22 Aug 2012 21:12:26 +0000 :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week42-cold-water/#post-377451