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Thanks for the listen and feedback :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378684 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378682 Thu, 11 Oct 2012 15:49:09 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378682 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378677 Thu, 11 Oct 2012 13:36:22 +0000 I think the slower version works best. Say "he's lonely" instead of "not lonely." I got both changes in the revised version.
Thanks for the suggestions :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378677 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378660 Thu, 11 Oct 2012 00:49:06 +0000
I think the slower version works best. The faster version didn't quite catch the mood of being alone in the mall for a long night.

Consider changing the chorus so that it's more apparent that the guard is lonely. Say "he's lonely" instead of "not lonely." Just my humble opinion.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378660 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378649 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 15:30:42 +0000 I found myself wanting the song to have a much slower tempo. I'll give it a go.
As an aside I am reminded of the Tom Petty song "Nightwatchman" I hadn't heard that song, but definitely similar. Thanks for the info :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378649 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378647 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 14:24:27 +0000
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V8ynaJX3HH8]]> Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378647 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378646 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 04:59:14 +0000
Thanks for the read and feedback :D ...let me know if the link works for you when you have a chance to try again.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378646 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378645 Wed, 10 Oct 2012 04:50:39 +0000 I was not able to access the soundfile, so no comment on the demo. From reading the lyrics, they seem stark. It is interesting that you selected the third person perspective. I like the line "Dances with a mannequin on display".]]> Sunday Songwriters Group andygetch https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-378645 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-43392 Tue, 09 Oct 2012 17:52:11 +0000
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==========Revised Lyrics==============

The night guard walks the shopping mall
With a hat too big; paycheck too small
He doesn't have a gun; just a folding chair
It creeps out the mannequins the way he stares

Chorus
Nights can be lonely
He just wants to be alone; on his own
But he's lonely
He just wants to be alone; on his own
But he's lonely, lonely, lonely
He's lonely, lonely, lonely

The night guard walks the shopping mall
Fantasies fed by the billboard halls
He says I’m not worried 'bout my opening line
All the pretty girls I see are mine

chorus

Instrumental

The night guard walks the shopping mall
Pokes his night stick where the shadows fall
Dances with a mannequin on display
A cold hard smile in lingerie

chorus


==========Original Lyrics==============

The night guard walks the shopping mall
With a hat too big; paycheck too small
He doesn't have a gun; just a folding chair
It creeps out the mannequins the way he stares

Chorus
Nights can be lonely
He just wants to be alone; on his own
But not lonely
He just wants to be alone; on his own
But not lonely, lonely, lonely
Not lonely, lonely, lonely

The night guard walks the shopping mall
Fantasies fed by the billboard halls
He says I’m not worried 'bout my opening line
All the pretty girls I see are mine

chorus

Instrumental

The night guard walks the shopping mall
Pokes his night stick where the shadows fall
Dances with a mannequin on display
A cold hard smile in lingerie

chorus]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg10-week49-the-night-guard/#post-43392