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I've posted it up as is because it's holding up my assignment and everything else I promised Nick I'd do.  

For a four chord song it's taken me two nights to lay down the guitar track and as for the voice - collaborators welcome. ::)

Have a listen when posted, on Adam's site I'm Robert_ Mothers (Sunday name)

Bob ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55737 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55736 Sat, 08 Nov 2003 21:28:36 +0000
The prairie sky shines its million lights
A blanket of black with pin pricks of delight


I am sorry to see them changed

Go well
Jamir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55736 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55735 Fri, 07 Nov 2003 19:08:15 +0000
The trick is not to be defensive.  I think you have that part mastered. ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55735 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55734 Fri, 07 Nov 2003 18:53:27 +0000
The Prairie Sky

Alone on the prairie a vast land to roam
There's Many more months until I see home
The cattle I herd drive grow tired of my story
They've heard it from the Spoken by many drovers before me

The prairie sky shines its million lights is a vast, empty sight
A blanket of black with pin pricks of delight and a million lights
But I wish on the stars for the chance of a sight
Of my homestead, good crops and my loving wife

I took to the herding to make ends meet
After droughts and floods had me just about beat
My wife tends the homestead while I'm far away
And I ride this prairie day after day.

The prairie sky shines its million lights is a vast, empty sight
A blanket of black with pin pricks of delight and a million lights
But I wish on the stars for the chance of a sight
Of my homestead, good crops and my loving wife

I'd love a cold beer and a night by the fire
Instead I've cold coffee and a day long and tired
Or the chance to talk of trivial things
The cattle are loing but I've no heart to sing

I've driven these cattle all over the plain
And ended up back at the homestead again
I sip at my coffee and gaze at my wife
Must I leave her for more priarie sky

The prairie sky shines its million lights is a vast, empty sight
A blanket of black with pin pricks of delight and a million lights
But I wish on the stars for the chance of a sight
Of my homestead, good crops and my loving wife

I do try and take on board other people's suggestions but they warp and come out slightly differently.

I was going to credit the changes above but it's been on my work screen for an hour now and I'm worried someone will catch me even though I'm the boss. ;)

Bob]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55734 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55733 Fri, 07 Nov 2003 13:08:44 +0000
I still need to work on the last verse so we'll see what comes along - I quite like this rewrite as he doesn't want to go whereas personally, out on the plains  - try and stop me.

Bob  ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55733 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55732 Thu, 06 Nov 2003 21:21:31 +0000 should end without resolution, with a long, fading outro, as it instills a sense of continuation of the loneliness and drudgery.  

I get a kind of Eagles "Tequila Sunrise" feel from this song.

The revision to the chorus is a great improvement, but I think "vast, empty sight" might instill more of the intended feeling of lonely drudgery than "breathtaking"

Good song.
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maxwell https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55732 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55731 Thu, 06 Nov 2003 20:55:15 +0000
I had a rethink about the chorus as thought it was too wordy and instead have gone with:

The prairie sky is a breathtaking sight
A blanket of black and a million lights
But I wish on the stars for a simpler life
My homestead and my loving wife

I wanted to retain the coffee as it's very western in its association and I quite liked the line but felt, as Nick said, the song just sort of ends with no resolution or affirmation of the character's feelings.  So working on the following:

I've driven these cattle all over the plain
And ended up back at the homestead again
I sip at my coffee and gaze at my wife
Must I leave her for more priarie sky

I'm sure you'll let me know what you think ;)

I think it's not there yet but slowly something is happening to it.

Bob]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55731 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55730 Thu, 06 Nov 2003 17:56:45 +0000
What did I do as I read it back? I tinkered with the chorus to make the first two lines

"The prairie sky shines its million lights
A blanket of black pin pricked with delight"

and that was about it.

I thought the cold beer/ cold coffee lines were excellent.

Best,


A :-)
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Alan Green https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55730 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55729 Thu, 06 Nov 2003 01:57:15 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55729 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55728 Thu, 06 Nov 2003 01:54:21 +0000
The first two lines of the chorus seem a little awkward to me. I've tried saying and singing them and I just can't work around the second line. It seems out of character with the simple homespun man who's singing the rest of the song. Maybe something like this:

The prairie sky shines full of stars every night
As I lie on my blanket by the campfire's light
But I wish on the stars for the chance of a sight
Of my homestead, good crops and my loving wife

Just a thought.

Peace

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-1-bob/#post-55728