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"my sweet wooden baby is whom i always rely "

that one for instance.
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Nick Torres https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56336 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56335 Thu, 15 Jan 2004 18:51:52 +0000
VERSE  1
when im low and theres no one to lift me high
my sweet wooden baby is whom i always rely
shes sings to me softly in the dark of the night
i work out her tension she make it all alright
 
CHORUS  
"Drop the G string baby  
you're wound up much to tight  
Let me help you get in tune  
No need to fret tonight "

all your fussing and rushing tease me to no end
but when im with you baby, i need no other friend
even when im low you got me feeling so high
its so crazy hunny you aint even gotta try

let me hold you and  

CHORUS

Oh baby you can drive me so d**n wild  
with u in my life im laughin like a child  
It's real simple baby your everything i need  
so come relax and take a seat upon my knee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group rustnvrsleeps https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56335 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56334 Thu, 15 Jan 2004 07:48:07 +0000 all that baby s**t at the end into a diaper. :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MJBird https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56334 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56333 Wed, 14 Jan 2004 16:36:39 +0000
good song i enjoyed reading it. I agree with bob on the chorus. The last line in the chorus threw me of just for a little until I realized you meant a guitar run, fingers bleed ect. But I'm thinking someone who don't play guitar may not know what you mean.Just the same I like it.
Just a thought.

take care
inkpen :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Inkpen https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56333 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56332 Tue, 13 Jan 2004 00:10:37 +0000
For a first submission this is really well written and cleverly done - oh yeah and clean.   ;)

Some lines just seem a bit too long

but when im with you baby, baby i need no other friend

I would take out the second baby

And in the last verse maybe look at knocking out some of the 'baby, baby, baby' parts. As a suggestion

baby baby baby you drive me so d**n wild
baby baby baby got me acting like a child
baby baby baby your everything i need
oh baby baby for you i'd run to bleed

to

Oh baby you can drive me so d**n wild
And you've got me acting like a child
It's simple your everything i need
oh baby for you i'd run to bleed

Good stuff

Bob  :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56332 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56331 Mon, 12 Jan 2004 22:22:40 +0000 Hi'a rustnvrsleeps

Great all round and you kept it clean.... better than I could have done :-[

Just one line here below
all your fussing and rushing tense tease me to no end

woould sound better I think

go well
Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-56331 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-11-rustnvrsleeps/#post-1630 Mon, 12 Jan 2004 22:07:28 +0000
jamir's drop the g string

VERSE  1
when im down and theres no one to lift me high
my sweet wooden baby is whom i always rely
shes sings to me softly in the dark of the night
i work out her tension she make it all alright

CHORUS
"Drop the G string baby
you're wound up much to tight
Let me help you get in tune
No need to fret tonight "

all your fussing and rushing tense me to no end
but when im with you baby, baby i need no other friend
even when im low you got me feeling so high
its so crazy hunny you aint even gotta try

let me hold you and

CHORUS

baby baby baby you drive me so damn wild
baby baby baby got me acting like a child
baby baby baby your everything i need
oh baby baby for you i'd run to bleed
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