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Thanks for your kind comments
And thank you for taking the time to critiquing my lyrics

Blessings. Olav
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56413 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56412 Fri, 23 Jan 2004 00:03:21 +0000 I can't really add much more than was already said except to say I really liked these lines

White clouds for imagination pose

Let the waves be our witness

take care
inkpen :)
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Inkpen https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56412 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56411 Thu, 22 Jan 2004 22:54:42 +0000
You did a fantastic job of creating a story just from a scene. It was very descriptive and I wouldn't change anything! Fabulous!  ;D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Gina https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56411 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56410 Thu, 22 Jan 2004 22:24:58 +0000
I feel like I'm not really contributing unless I can offer some sort of suggestion or criticism, but truthfully, I don't think I would change anything.   I will read it a few more times, but initially, I think you employ words the way Monet employed brushes and pigment, which is the heart of songwriting.  Very well done.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-56410 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-1649 Thu, 22 Jan 2004 20:56:08 +0000 So here it goes.
Painting is, Path trough the corn at Pourville    
by Claude Monet
You can see it at
www.art.com
Click on artist tab and then Monet

Blessings. Olav


IN THIS MOMENT

V1
Crops framed by the songs of waves
Salty breeze sculpt white sand
Sun scorched tang scents the air
Horizons edge expand

Salty taste on her soft lips
Wet sand between naked toes
Ocean soothes with crumbling waves
White clouds for imagination pose

Chorus
Let us stay here.
In this moment.
To the end of forever.
Let the waves be our witness.
Let the ocean bind our love.

V2
Soft plaid covers velvet sand.
Your hand tucked into mine.
Ocean breeze in your hair
Crystal, cold with wine

"Take me to the depths of love"
Whispered in my ear
Sun reflects in princess cut
First love pioneer

Chorus
Let us stay here.
In this moment.
To the end of forever.
Let the waves be our witness.
Let the ocean bind our love.

Bridge.
Sun sinks into white caped crests
Horizon red with fire
Driven by the songs of waves
Our passion rises higher

Chorus
Let us stay here.
In this moment.
To the end of forever.
Let the waves be our witness.
Let the ocean bind our love.

(Some kind of slow guitar rif)

Let the waves be our witness.
Let the ocean bind our love.
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Olav https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-12-olav/#post-1649