https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 00:58:04 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/paged/2/#post-56801 Wed, 18 Feb 2004 23:45:26 +0000 I am well pleased, spellbound you are
now where is Nick, he awoke this muse
and the assignment, was Bob's ruse

So we really need to hear their view
and see if they can take a cue
From peers, who so generously writ
Ideas to help this muse to wit.




]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/paged/2/#post-56801 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56800 Tue, 17 Feb 2004 23:48:55 +0000 That sets all who read it to post along
Rhyming couplet - filled critiques
Of, dare I say,  Iambic feet

It might seem silly, or worse, quite daft
To attempt to edit this lyrical craft
Instead I'll sit, rapt in its spell
And Jamir, as always, dear friend, go well!


Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56800 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56799 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 23:08:41 +0000 Though he could not rhyme in his critique
He simply wants to play a part
In this trend Scratch felt inclined to start

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56799 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56798 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 22:00:41 +0000 on this muses worst assignment day
I know not if this praise be fair
As mortal minds joined me there,

Nay, I dare say , as a wanton muse
Would never a mortal mind abuse
So I give you all thanks for my little ode
and I'll  take my leave from this abode.

Go well
Ja'mir  ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56798 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56797 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 08:56:15 +0000 in crafting a song we all long to hear,
an award thou shouldst receive, in truth,
for working in the word "forsooth"!

Wonderful.

-- Scratch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56797 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56796 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 07:42:15 +0000
Wow - way to take a topic, incorporate feedback, and then follow through!
Very interesting use of person/muse for the speaker.

I can't wait to hear this put to music!

- SP]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56796 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56795 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 00:33:07 +0000 with an Irish accent poet and note rhymn pretty well, as we say poot and noot , sometimes it pays to have an accent !!!!!

The melody is very Elizabethan aswell, and I might just record it on my oud ( which is like a lute)

Go well
Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56795 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56794 Thu, 12 Feb 2004 00:11:45 +0000
Only crit is in the little chorus bit you had. Poet and note don't really rhyme. But I really can't say anything bad about this. Its just a cool bit of writing. Whatever it is. hehe

-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56794 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56793 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 23:19:01 +0000
An Ode to a muse


The muse (spoken)

Strange magic pours from my soul
On ears that hear my story unfold
I curse the song and the lyre I play
I shall remain silent as from today


Other person (sung )

Come now muse, your magic's no curse
But a gift to those who hear your verse
It sooths troubled minds, and calms the soul
Is loved by the young and the old


The muse (spoken)

Can it be true , can it be real
That the words from my lips are a gift ,you feel
If that is so, then sing I must
Go!, sprinkle my lyre with fairy dust


The muse (sung)

I'll sing in the morn, when the moon is high
When the stars are bright, when birds fly
From the top of trees, to the waters deep
You'll hear my voice, till this heart ceases....... to beat


Other person (spoken )

Forsooth, now, I would desire
A quieter life with no lyre
I think the muse doth sing to much
Per chance she takes a lighter touch


Chant in the background or as a chorus


Play the lyre softly
Sound a pure note
The naiads and faeries
Miss their sweet poet

Go well
Ja'mir ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56793 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-15-the-song-2/#post-56792 Wed, 11 Feb 2004 00:29:10 +0000
By the way wher does the saying come from at the bottom of your posts, I really like it.
Ja'mir

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