https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 15:31:49 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56778 Wed, 18 Feb 2004 22:23:28 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Mattutaylor https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56778 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56777 Wed, 18 Feb 2004 18:04:37 +0000
As folks will point out, think of all the people making money for singing who truly can't sing!

Peace

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56777 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56776 Wed, 18 Feb 2004 02:39:48 +0000
I have recorded this using audacity, but to be quite frank i am S**t scared of posting it, because i can not sing what so ever. SERIOUSLY! Any advice guys?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Mattutaylor https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56776 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56775 Tue, 17 Feb 2004 22:54:31 +0000 Making those lines more concise definitely improves the reading of it.  But, i've encountered times where what you're singing, and they are reading don't jive, so..........
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Denim_Tonque https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56775 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56774 Tue, 17 Feb 2004 14:17:28 +0000
the last verse, i must've forgot to press enter between "Uneartherd" and "things".

If its any help guys the verse is Am C G7

Chorus is G Cadd9 G G D Am
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Mattutaylor https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56774 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56773 Tue, 17 Feb 2004 00:50:15 +0000
You might want to think about losing some of the padding in the first verse as it'll make it more punchy:

Here today, gone tomorrow
Leaving memories, best of forgotten
She disappeared, into thin air
Nothin i could do, but stand round and stare

Try doing this with the rest of the verses particulary the last one which seems to have a couple of overlong lines at the start.

Otherwise

Great stuff

Bob ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56773 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56772 Mon, 16 Feb 2004 15:34:47 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Mattutaylor https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56772 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56771 Mon, 16 Feb 2004 07:08:12 +0000
And you should submitt the MP3.  :)


Good work,
Laura]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BlackSwan https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-56771 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-1734 Mon, 16 Feb 2004 03:58:28 +0000
Illusion

Here today, gone tomorrow
Leaving memories, best of forgotten
She disappeared, into thin air
Nothin i could do, but stand round and stare

BRIDGE - And now she's just a

CHORUS -
Fragment of my, imagination
In this twisted world i call my own
Lost inside a wild ILLUSION
Still never to scared to show

My worst fears, just became true
My darkest nightmares, (there)all about you
Every night I would dream you were fake
n you always wondered why I slepy awake

BRIDGE

CHORUS

So I've come to terms, you're not here anymore
The secrets unearthed, things gone back like before
Here today, gone tomorrow
Leaving memories, best of forgotten.

Not sure about you guys but i imagine this in a 3 doors down style. I actually have written music for this song too, i just gotta pluck up the courage to submit it as an mp3.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Mattutaylor https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-16-illusion-crit-please/#post-1734