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No worries.  You've been playing longer than I have.  It will probably be a while before I get anything recorded.  

Life is what happens when you're making other plans...

:D

Mike]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MikeO https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57233 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57232 Tue, 06 Apr 2004 11:51:11 +0000
Uke,... I actually played with that line a couple of different ways.  I usually give a higher precedence to tense in grammatical rules.  (of those that I pay attention to)  So to say "you'd think" while grammatically correct, would yank the reader / listener from the past, into the present, then shove them right back into the past again.  It's a bit disorienting, and you run the risk of that whole "grandfather paradox" thing that I'm loathe to deal with.  So that means I have to try to fit "You would have thought into the meter.  I tried:

"Youd've thought"  - looked way to weird for me
"You'd have thought" - didn't fit the meter.
or
"You'd thought"  - not correct, but it fits, and if I say it anywhere in Thurmont, nobody'd bat an eye.  So that's why I kept it.  But you are correct in that it's incorrect.

MikeO -- thanks for the push, man.  But at the moment, I don't have a mic.  If I ever get around to getting one (I know they're cheap) I suppose this will be the first one I'll try to record.  But any aesthetic value that may be existent in the music would be more than offset by my voice.  And the music would probably have very little to begin with.  Since I've only been playing about 3 months.But we'll see.

Thanks again everyone, very encouraging.

-- Scratch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57232 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57231 Tue, 06 Apr 2004 09:57:25 +0000
Let me give you another push:  
It 's great!
Can't wait to hear it!  :D

Do you have the MP3 downloaded?

                                     Mike]]> Sunday Songwriters Group MikeO https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57231 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57230 Mon, 05 Apr 2004 02:45:21 +0000


All the best,]]> Sunday Songwriters Group leftygtr https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57230 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57229 Sun, 04 Apr 2004 22:09:33 +0000
Outstanding!

A joy to read, very visual and well told

Brilliant

Bob :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57229 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57228 Thu, 01 Apr 2004 17:14:54 +0000
I really enjoyed this and I think that it's a great example of what Bob was looking for in this week's assignment. I especially liked how you used the details of the story to make the "universal truths" of the chorus stand out. When reading the chorus the second time, I couldn't help but smile and nod when I got to the line:

music sounds quite different,  
as you go from place to place

Your decision to use the chorus as "bookends" made this work very well and kept this line from being overused. Smart.

Peace

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57228 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57227 Thu, 01 Apr 2004 05:30:38 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57227 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57226 Wed, 31 Mar 2004 08:43:38 +0000
I have to agree with Marv and Ja'mir: great job on this! I love the way you tell a clear story while keeping the strong flow and rhyme scheme intact. Bravo.

- SP]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57226 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57225 Tue, 30 Mar 2004 22:23:31 +0000
go well
Ja'mir]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamir https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57225 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57224 Tue, 30 Mar 2004 14:51:55 +0000
-Marv]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/ssg2-week-22-bones/#post-57224